Sing me a Song

Sing me a Song

A Poem by Annalisa
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A special thanks to Avery James who helped me fix this poem up and make it better. Hope you all enjoy.

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Sing me a song to help me sleep,

So that I dream sweet fantasies

Instead of all to real realities.

 

As your voice rises and falls

to the melodies in the air

My mind clears.

And for that tiny second-

For the first time in months-

I can breathe like before.

 

I wonder why

I can only rest when you are near.

Could it be?

Your voice Rich and pure,

replaces every foul sound I hear.

 

So come closer,

my dear. Sing me to sleep.

So I dream sweet fantasies-

Dreams I hadn't had before you.   

© 2008 Annalisa


Author's Note

Annalisa
A special thanks to Avery James who helped me fix this poem up and make it better. Hope you all enjoy.

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Wow, I really liked this piece... I think many people can relate to this piece. I know that I have a few friends that can basically take the hurt away and just let me breathe. This was wonderful, the flow worked very well (as do all your poems) It had a good rhythm too... i felt myself swaying to it. Great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Wow, I really liked this piece... I think many people can relate to this piece. I know that I have a few friends that can basically take the hurt away and just let me breathe. This was wonderful, the flow worked very well (as do all your poems) It had a good rhythm too... i felt myself swaying to it. Great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Soothing poem...very beautiful flow to it, only it lacks interest. There doesn't seem to be enough spark in this poem, almost like it was something you wanted to do just for the sake of doing it.



Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Flows beautifully and softly....just need another 'o' on 'to' though....do we.don't we? The rest is your decision! ;)

Posted 15 Years Ago


oh how nice this is..sing me a song
so i sleep well..dream nice fantasies
not cruel realities
i like these titles ..Sing me a song
Dance me all night long
Sway me in your arms
Shake me right and left till i feel dazed and fall into your arms

Sing me a song to help me sleep,
So that I dream sweet fantasies
Instead of all to real realities.
As your voice rises and falls
to the melodies in the air
My mind clears.
And for that tiny second-
For the first time in months-
I can breathe like before.
So come closer,
my dear. Sing me to sleep.
Dreams I hadn't had before you.
how beautiful these lines are ..how tender..how sweet
i really enjoyed this

this is really lovely write..wonderful

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice, sweet, easy to read yet very profound. I like it.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your signature in words remains. It still has your emotion and soul. That is vital

In some situations, revision removes the very thumbprint of the writer, and with the message gone, so is the very soul.

Great fundamentals.

A great piece.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really loved this - sweet, romantic, and yet still dark. The lines "Your voice Rich and pure, / replaces every foul sound I hear. " is beautiful, as is the idea of one good thing happening in your life, and being capable of erasing all the bad things happening. Great job. =)


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Looks amazing. Props to us!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Let me read it a few more times and I'm sure I can get back to you. It's definitely good and I can feel the meaning in it. Do you want me to play around with it? I looooove collaborating poetry and experimenting with versions and variations.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very uplifting piece... liked the imagery and flow in this... overall a very good read... nice job on this one!!!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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