Quiet Gardens Keep

Her face is like the rising sun

who's light cast shadow on me

In darkness far and silent

where no one else could see

A mind and wit full from dreams

shines bright in summer's embrace

Close beside some ancient column

the wind leaves love's sweet trace

Her lips do scream to love me

in the small quiet gardens keep

Kissing my cheek each evening

before I lay my head to sleep

 

Author's Note

In a garden long ago we walked and spoke of a future. Reality became a much better predictor of happiness

Reviews

[Star Wolf]

Tender and romantic.

[R J Askew]

Enchanting creation of an otherly place. I felt like I was in some Roman villa, lost in the hills in a time of tranquility.

[Jacqueline Lopez]

This is a beautiful poem, really sweet.

[Sean M. Addams]

love the romantic feel of this piece..great job on this one!!!

[The Last Poetic King]

Good piece here.

[rielovella]

good poem

[little lily Bride of Ch..]

So Lovely Very Romantic you have such Beauty with these kinds of poems i truly love them the Most cause i am a Sucker for love its Amazing how the Beuaty of the heart can Express its beauty and amazing love. Beautiful work

[The Perfectionist]

Who's should be Whose in the second line there.
Summers should be summer's in the sixth
Loves should be love's in the eighth
Finally, it doesn't make any sense to say that 'her lips do scream to'. The 'to' is extraneous. Get rid of it. Modify the line if you need to keep the rhythm, but that just sounds silly. On second thought, you can keep it if you drop the quotations and make it a phrase. Up to you.

There's not really anything I can say about the content that hasn't been said twice already. It's simple, well-written (mostly), and elegant.