LIFE

LIFE

A Poem by Amila Jay
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24/07/12

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When the world has lost its glory

The eyes of truth are blind

The seed of a lie will spread its roots

And soar its wings high

Throw down the fierce spears

Of death and gory

To face a battle called life

© 2012 Amila Jay


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Amila Jay
Just words that flow into my mind .... your comments are appreciated :))

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Oh. My. God.
This is absolutely stunning. Loved the wise words, the truth about life, worded with such powerful thoughts. I enjoyed the way you brought reference to nature, the metaphors were amazing, and this just flowed with that inherent brilliance of rhythm and voice that your poems exhibit.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

8 Years Ago

Glad you liked it .. Thanks a bunch =)



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Well crafted beautiful poignant write.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh. My. God.
This is absolutely stunning. Loved the wise words, the truth about life, worded with such powerful thoughts. I enjoyed the way you brought reference to nature, the metaphors were amazing, and this just flowed with that inherent brilliance of rhythm and voice that your poems exhibit.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

8 Years Ago

Glad you liked it .. Thanks a bunch =)
I have been to places. Where one more day of life is precious. The poem open the door to thoughts answer by living and trying to understand life. I like the complete poem. A strong ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Amila Jay

8 Years Ago

Thanks =)
Very thought provoking. Excellent write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Interesting. Once again very well done and an intriguing read!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very well written piece..your choice of words is amazing..

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Amila Jay

8 Years Ago

Thanks for that :))
the words, they lure u to read the whole poem, i love it


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

well.. its amazing how sometimes words unexpectedly just.. flow into our minds. Anyway, this s a really short, well written piece. I enjoyed this one!

Gotta shelve it!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

8 Years Ago

Thanks :-D
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CT
Short and sweet. The words, while well organized, are rather cliche in their sentiment- not necessarily a bad thing, just something I feel needs to be remarked upon. The only line that strikes me as particularly jarring is "Of death and gory". The context of "gory" seems unbelievably forced, and while it doesn't break the flow of the piece, it does serve to be slightly distracting. The first two lines are my personal favorite out of the poem, and also the ones which seem, to me, hold the most meaning and genuine emotion.
All in all, a somewhat deep, enjoyable little poem. Keep it up.
I bid thee adieu- CT


Posted 8 Years Ago


Amila Jay

8 Years Ago

Thanks a bunch :))
What I like a lot here is the tension between the message, a peaceful one, and the style of the content, which is direct, strong. A fine poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Amila Jay

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot :))

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Amila Jay
Amila Jay

Kandy, Sri Lanka



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