Blind

Third attempt at rhyming. Once again, I'm sure it is sappy.

Every time I see your light being shined,
Your brightness makes me go blind.
Your love for me is just so true
My mind can't quite get over you.
I can't get enough of the love you show,
With each loving word, you make my blood flow.
Love like yours is hard to find,
I just can't keep you out of my mind.

Author's Note

tell me what you think.

Reviews

[Iota]

This one rhymes perfectly! It is okay, to be sappy, trust me I am right there with you in the sappy writing society. The thing is I am glad you are taking the time to bask and enjoy this love you have. So many are quick to find quirks and things that are wrong instead of just enjoying the moment for what it is. Live and Love with out fear.

[AbsentElements]

Your attempts at rhyming have finally payed off. Well done.

[AnonymousScribe]

Short and sweet.
Though love poems are all too common, you've definitely got all of the ingredients for an applaudable poem.

[A]

I like it! I love the rhyming and the emotion in this piece. I really enjoyed this poem! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the joy and contentment you described in your poem. Love can make us go blind with happiness. I like the flow and the positive nature of the poem.
Coyote

[Jillian Alexis]

this is simple yet beautiful

[Somewhere]

I think it's beautiful. Hold on to that love because you are right love like that is hard to find.

[Poeticpiers]

your rhyming is pretty good but you pay no attention meter so read aloud it is choppy
Your first rhyming couplet is a forced ryme the past tense of shine is shone but apart from that its fine

[Ardeth Lane]

The rhyming was very good. I loved it.

[Goddisia]

I forgot it is possible to write like this. Genius lies in simplicity. So does the power to move and stir the most human of emotions... love it

[Nish Nish the Fish]

I was intrigued to read this becasue of the picture, i have the same picture for one of my poems, "Doomed to Blindness" which i'd love for you to read.
this was really great!
a nice little summary of being blinded by ones love, in comparison to perhaps the sun, which is so bright, for one to stare it for too long would be blinding. this person's love must be so bright. i say, embrace in the light, and accept the lack of sight, cus i know i'd rather be blind then deaf, specially if it means i get love.
well done ;)