Patience

Patience

A Chapter by Luna
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4th attempt at rhyming.

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Innocent girl with the braids in your hair,
Skipping through a field with your teddy bear.
You search for love but it is not there.
You cry and cry, saying it's not fair.

Innocent girl, one day you'll see.
You don't find love, love finds thee.
It can find you anywhere, just wait and see.
Be patient, my child, that is the key.

As you grow old, you'll understand
Innocence dies and hearts expand
Opening up room enough for you to stand.
Be patient and it'll turn out grand.


© 2010 Luna


Author's Note

Luna
If anyone can help me with a title, I would love some ideas!

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Aweeee, that's so wonderfully true! I'm so adding this to my library ^_^ it's wonderful! 100/100 AGAIN!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Awesome
This will be harder then I thought...Good luck

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like the title Patient. It is the words that leave the biggest imprint when I read the poem. Poem is excellent. Need to walk slow and easy into love. Allow each moment to be kind and sweet memories. Outstanding wisdom in your words.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Magnificent! I truly enjoy the words and the message from this beautiful poem! Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of inspiration!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Hi Luna: I loved it, very well written and also it is a poem of truth. You cannot go searching for love, for if you do you will never find a love true and eternal. It must find you, for there is someone out there for each of us, we just as you said have to have Patience to wait. And Patience is a great title. Good job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love this. It flows flawlessly and is a truism. Beautifully composed...

Posted 9 Years Ago


oh this poem is wonderful!!
you are SO right, love is something you don't need to search for, it'll find you.
i'm still trying to accept that and believe in it.
your poem helped a little :)
i love the flow, and the rhythm and the simplicity of it.
and as for the title, i think yours is perfect.
if it were my poem though, i'd probably title it something like "Innocence is not bliss" --idk lol you may use that if you wish.
very well done!

Posted 9 Years Ago


This poem flows perfectly, I love it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


ummmmm.... "Searching for Love"

I love the poem. Great flow!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like the title, but I loved this poem .. very well done.the rhyme is well done and not just for sound , but meaning.. it's great ..

Posted 9 Years Ago



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