Goddess of the Moon

My sentiments as I watched the moon one night.

Goddess of the moon

Reigning in the starless night

Where is the crown

That your mystic beauty demands?

As you swim in the sea of clouds,

Sweep the world in solemn silence

And overwhelm my senses in greyscale...

Goddess of the moon

In deadly shade of melancholy,

I pour out my sentiments to you.

Cast a spell on me, a poet

Enchant my fingertips

And move my heart and my pen

That my words may pierce a lover's soul...

Goddess of the moon

Watch over him tonight

As he lies on his bed (or hers).

Give him dreams of love

Or memories of me

That he will never forget

The scars that brought me here to you...

Goddess of the moon

Sole witness to my tears

Lull me to slumber.

And as I sleep my thoughts away,

I wish to wake up in your embrace...

Author's Note

This is the first time the goddess of the moon compelled me to write about her. I hope you enjoy reading this, as much as I enjoy watching her beauty. :x

Reviews

[smilempsn]

:) :)
nicely written.. I loooove Moon soooo much, that I can sleep in moonlight in coldest day too.. Just one difference , I think Moon as HIM.. and u consider as HER..

[ASPAR (A Sol Poet Arnay..]

Well you are fast becoming a favorite of mine here another lovely & well penned piece...
Well done keep writing :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

That's too early to say, haha, but thank you so much! I appreciate your reviews more than you'll ever know. :)

[ASPAR (A Sol Poet Arnay Rumens)]

If I do not like work I do not read it nor comment,is that easy enough lol

[L4rn13]

I found myself drawn to this poem and I'm glad I read it. Truely amazing, conveyed beautiful imagery and flowed very nicely :) Really liked this poem :)

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much! :)

[KAin]

There's something about the moon that inspires thoughts of magic and romance in everyone.
Maybe it's because, despite the fact that it's really an enormous hunk of rock in space, it's found a way to shine. I could get into the science of it, but where's the romance in that? It carries the memory of the sun in its reflection, and it makes it gentler than the cold darkness it might have been otherwise.
No doubt we all would be dark if we didn't have memories of kindness and love in us.

An excellent poem, Blue. Keep it up!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Landred, for sharing your wonderful insights! :)

[Jonathan Dalton]

This was nice and gentle and 'of the night', almost like a prayer...

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Praying to the Goddess, that is... :) Thank you, Jonathan! ;)

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use the moon and the goddess. I like the flow of thoughts and the desire in the poem.
Goddess of the moon
"Watch over him tonight
As he lies on his bed (or hers).
Give him dreams of love
Or memories of me
That he will never forget
The scars that brought me here to you..."
I like the above prayer. I wonder do old lovers remember the people lost in life? Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you again, Coyote! :)

[annie lee]

I enjoyed the lyricism of your lines; the poem has a musical cadence to it. But I am a little thrown by:
"As he lie on his bed (or hers)"
His or hers? And it should be "he lies" -- the third stanza rather takes us from the magical world of the moon goddess to the darker place of remembered hurt. That fractures the flow and causes the reader to question the poet's motivations.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Wow, Annie. I overlooked that line. Thank you so much. It's "he lies", indeed. ;)
Anyway, the '(or hers') is meant to show that the man might be in his new girlfriend's bed. I put it inside the parenthesis to show the uncertainty (maybe, sarcasm, too) of the speaker.

Once again, thank you so much. :)

[Tam Warink]

This "senses in greyscale" seems totally out of place and at odds with the style and sense that preceded it. This too, "As he lie on his bed" ... must be rethought and redone. However, the gist of it is always good for an expeditious weaving. Carry on.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks for this honest and constructive review, Tam! I REALLY appreciate this. :)

[LQSwift]

Nicely written. I enjoyed the flow of the words and the words you used

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, Swift! BTW, my favorite songwriter happens to be Taylor Swift. :)

[LQSwift]

I only liked her first CD.

[Tom C]

Very nice. The moon is one of my favorite photographic subjects it is like a woman always changing and delighting my soul with each change and tingle. Thank you for showing me the moon in a new light. It is quite enjoyable to read and feel. Keep up the great work and awesome pages of poetry.
And overwhelm my senses in greyscale...
I like this line it defines the moon and the view very much. I have often wondered why it looks so colorless. Yet a beautiful woman needs no makeup. So it is great. Thank you for sharing.

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hey, that line of yours is great: "Yet a beautiful woman needs no makeup!" ;) Thanks for the encouraging review, Mike. I, too, love the moon, :x

[Tom C]

If you ever see pictures of Jennifer Lawrence she needs no makeup. I seen pictures of her yesterday with no makup and she is stunningly beautiful. Young but beautiful.
Your welcome keep writing.