You

You are a monster,

tailored perfectly for me.

You exist solely for my destruction.

You torment me with your lies

and distorted philosophies.

You feed me with your thoughts.

You poison me with your curses,

polluting my mind with your shade of evil.

 

You are my ultimate definition of hell

and you hold me captive in your abyss.

You refuse to free me from your grasp

for I am your favorite prisoner.

You delight in my vulnerability,

my faint resolutions,

my vain attempts to escape.

 

You applaud my falls,

taking every error

as a chance to condemn me.

You laugh at my virtues

and you question my beliefs.

You take pleasure in my cries of agony;

my screams are music to your ears.

 

You wipe away every memory of bliss,

draining me of life,

emptying me of myself.

You strip me off of my heart

in your desire to make me be like you.

You are my monster, my enemy.

I am you and you are me.

Author's Note

Thank you for reading! :)

Reviews

[Gregory Stires]

You are a monster,
tailored perfectly for me.
You exist solely for my destruction.
You torment me with your lies
and distorted philosophies.
You feed me with your thoughts.
You poison me with your curses,
polluting my mind with your shade of evil.

i like how just by the first couple of lines that its about the narrators conflict is internal.and that they are the emotions that they loathe and ignore that the monster uses which the narrater sees them as poisen.

You are my ultimate definition of hell
and you hold me captive in your abyss.
You refuse to free me from your grasp
for I am your favorite prisoner.
You delight in my vulnerability,
my faint resolutions,
my vain attempts to escape.

in this i think it could use more diction like instead of ultimate definition of hell; you are my demon forever bound to my soul.not to say that it is bad i am just saying that would make give the reader the impression that the monster forever torments them like the ones in hell do to sinners.

You applaud my falls,
taking every error
as a chance to condemn me.
You laugh at my virtues
and you question my beliefs.
You take pleasure in my cries of agony;
my screams are music to your ears.

i like how you give the impression that the monster feeds off your suffering and breaks the narrater down with their own flaws.

You wipe away every memory of bliss,
draining me of life,
emptying me of myself.
You strip me off of my heart
in your desire to make me be like you.
You are my monster, my enemy.
I am you and you are me.

in this i see how the narrator ignores its dark side; causing it fight with the goodness and try to consume it since it probably thinks that there can be only one side. that is wrong because there can be a balance between them by accepting both of them and not giving into them which would keep the balance between them intact.

[Anita Singh]

This is a masterpiece.. Truly! it cant get any better than this. Love the concept of depicting the conflict within. Hats off!!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Annabella. I'm sure you can write better than this. :)

[Laura Harrison]

This is a well-portrayed poem describing the demon that is in all of us. I can also relate to this

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me. :)

[Quoting Ravens]

I really like this one. Makes me think of our own inner sins

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much. :)

[Bowers]

a thought provoking ... though slightly sketchy piece... I enjoyed it immensely :) nicely done! It was... almost as though it could relate to an actual situation, as though a relationship between a boy and a girl, but the girl isnt able to leave her possessive boyfriend... you know? thats where my mind went, oast the monster... but I loved the last line... " I am you and you are me."

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Hmm, interesting view, actually. I like your own interpretation. Smart. :) Thank you, Becky. :)

[Bowers]

thanks, and your welcome! :D

[gombeggar]

sounds like a real life horror story...those are the worst kind...well done writ...like the beatle-ish line at the end 2 ...and we are all together

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks a lot! :)

[nibhz]

a real and painful description! pain pierces the heart of the reader. strong depiction of painful experiences and feelings!

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you so much, Nibhz. :)

[dw817]

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Umm ... hmm ... *scratching head* OK, I got nothing. I don't think I've ever had it this bad, not even with my inner demons at night. Here is hoping better days ahead for you, lass. :)
http://bit.ly/GRGDUr

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Good for you, David. Thank you so much. :)

[dw817]

Take a hand, grab a star, swing it up and down, and there you have a destination. If you aren't looking for a particular place to go though, you could take this, if not - go where thou wilt, the best music, light, and ambience. :)

[Mae Taylor]

Speaking to the fears of my heart

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thanks, May. :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

BD --- Interesting development with this write...there is a voice throughout the whole read and the audience can focus in the entirety...Good to read your work…Thanks for the invite to read your thoughts to paper at Writers Café...I'm back to work with copy writer and doing my best to write 1000 words a day...and a subject you do not get to choose...I ‘m happy to say I have 102 copy writes to go…will be busy the next few months on other projects...so I will read all RR"s might just take a bit longer to get a review...hope you understand...plus promote my book: The Onyx - Vena Amoris...for late next month release…I have very little time on my hands…making the most of everyday and taking today to read as many as I can…keep writing and sharing your creative talent here and elsewhere…

[Azure Montessa (Blue)]

Thank you, Glen. :)