He loves me not

Just a quick draft of a poem I wrote. Just messing around with the idea of the flower pedals and game we all knew from when we were growing up.

He loves me!

He loves me not :(

The words travel in my brain over and over

He asks me out!

Wait, other people are coming?

The tunnels of confusion never end.

Everywhere I turn there is a new opening

And closing.

Can I just hide now?

No! I can't escape it

I can't run away,

I can't forward the clock to when he makes up his mind

So I'll make it for him 

With the flowers I hold,

He loves me not.

Reviews

[Olumegbon]

Hmmm, pretty nice. Like the idea behind it. Nice one

[Relic's Bare Trees]

The ending came as somewhat of a surprise. Feelings for others can lead to shyness, confusion and doubt though. But sometimes we find out we were right later on. :)

[wordsofheart]

I have to say,your draft of a poem is very well written. The theme is very unique and thoughtful and beautifully written.Keep it up!

[Ashley Rachelle]

thank you!

[wordsofheart]

My pleasure :)