Magnifique

Magnifique

A Poem by Ashleyx

Make me over in diamonds found in common places

Tear me up and bury the pieces,

The mirror is a little over a thousand shards, marking a trail to my grave


I am broken toes in ruby slippers

Following the trail a witch has lain out

I am the auburn hair of the psychopath, sewn into a wig

Accented with a golden tiara


Make me over in silks from the worms beneath my feet

Rip open my scalp and let the thoughts pour out,

The mindless are a little over a thousand, ushering my path towards the chapel


I am staring out with blinded eyes

At sunsets of black and white

I am the fingertips without sensation, 

Touching the napes of virgin necks


Dotted lines along the imperfections of a young girl 

Who wants to walk the runway, with broken toes and golden tiaras

The chaos of the flashing lights will dull the sunsets until she is blind



© 2010 Ashleyx


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I loved the whole structure of
this write. I do however agree
with Agnes about being blind part.
Overall a very good write..

Posted 8 Years Ago


Wow! I found this amazing and powerful.
This is a very well written write!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


This was a very well written poem, In fact I was surprised.
Critiquing this will be hard.
You said "I am staring out with blinded eyes"
Then in the last line you said "dull the sunsets until she is blind"
I get the feeling you switched who's body you were purposefully sticking to.

Posted 9 Years Ago


The poem is very strong. A lot of statement stood out.
"I am broken toes in ruby slippers
Following the trail a witch has lain out"
Sometime unreal things can be put upon us. Better to walk away from the group and find a safe and happy path. The poem made me feel sorry for the girl. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very good and I want that dog in that picture.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very surreal, like a dreamscape.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on July 29, 2010
Last Updated on September 9, 2010
Tags: beauty, blindness, shallow, dark, fashion, vanity

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Ashleyx
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My name is Ashley, i am one of a kind, but really nothing special. I write, i dance, i live, i play. i love getting reviews, they make my life. So please if you wouldn't mind, please read something.. more..

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