Last Words

Last Words

A Poem by The dark story

Last Words

 

 

The Frosty Wind is embracing me

Making me cold and numb.

The Darkness is chasing me

Enshrouding my eyes to the demise

 

My heart’s throbbing is getting fainter

My will is getting weaker.

Now I’m realizing

Slowly and painfully

That my soul is leaving

Slowly and excruciatingly.

 

So before I say farewell

I want you to hear my last words.

Please, listen them carefully

What I’m saying so regretfully.

 

I know I broke your heart

Wounded them with so much scars

 

I know I left you

And the pain I put you through.

 

But I’m sorry

 I never meant to….

meant to hurt you so  deeply

So I beg you…

beg you to please forgive me.

 

Don’t cry

Don’t detest me

Please..forgive me

 

Before my soul

bows before the Death’s hall

I want to see your bright smile

Overshadowing the sun’s light.

 

Before my breath fades away

I want you to adhere on just one way

A way where fragrance of goodness splay

That’s where you must stay…

 

 

 

 

© 2013 The dark story


Author's Note

The dark story
i am an anime-o-holic girl and Naruto is one of my favorite anime.this poem is kinda inspired by my favorite character in it:"Itachi Uchiha" who says farewell to his little brother Sasuke "Forgive me Sasuke..there's no next time"...i hope you'll like it..please tell me mistakes in it..

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The caps is fine for elements. WHy is frosty distinguished with caps? It's an adjective, and a common one at that. "to adhere on " is a strange locution, syntax-wise. Theme is abstruse and aural motif was an enigma for me to pronounce mentally. It's not very lucid. Is is eulogistic?

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The dark story

7 Years Ago

well.i wrote in the review :"The Theme"
Laura Maidah

7 Years Ago

Whoops. I was on a pseudo-browser. It showed in tiny blurs.
The dark story

7 Years Ago

well..i've personified Frosty Wind and The Darkness as the Hell Girl...accoding to japanese mytholo.. read more



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Great! You just expressed how to be one of the characters in the anime...


Posted 6 Years Ago


Yeah, i know about Itachi's death since my dear friend was whining about it and she even showed me the video of his actual death. Well, as an insight, we all realize the important thing in life once it's gone, right? The times when we can never really bring everything back again to it's usual way (;

Posted 6 Years Ago


The dark story

6 Years Ago

oh yeah indeed that was the most emotional moment in all...well i'm kinda used to it becauase almost.. read more
Rhianne Ney

6 Years Ago

You requested me to do so and it never hurts to read anything (:
Before my soul

bows before the Death’s hall

I want to see your bright smile

Overshadowing the sun’s light.
Something magical and out of this word I eeland see in your writes that takes the reader above and beyond to new wrlds away from our mere existence... Wow...:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


The dark story

6 Years Ago

wow ..thanks for this lovely compliment...i am glad you liked it:)
Sami Khalil

6 Years Ago

I did . And I picked my favorite lines...:)
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Pax
my friend loves to watch naruto... this is quite a lovely and touching dedication to the character... you've done well on conveying the feelings....
its a poignant peice...
great job!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Oh well wow .. I know that scene in Naruto amd you did seriously describe it in an awesome way here ... Overshadowing the suns light .. great line and it just goes to show that forgiving is one of the best elements out there and keeping hatred for someone makes you a hater so just forgive and live .. thats just how the life should be

Posted 6 Years Ago


The dark story

6 Years Ago

yeah.you're right!!!
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Muhammad Qasim

6 Years Ago

I know .. i am always right
touching

Posted 7 Years Ago


The dark story

7 Years Ago

thanks my friend!!:)
awww ): that is so awesome and sweet but yet so sad. it made me want to cry as i got nearer the end :'(

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The dark story

7 Years Ago

thanks for your kind reviews my friend.i'm glad that you liked it that much!!!!!!
Rose

7 Years Ago

No problem :)
It has a lyrical element to it, which I liked the most about it. Very heart wrenching. Keep it up!

Posted 7 Years Ago


The dark story

7 Years Ago

thanks a tonne!!!....
Very cool poem, I like Naruto (I'm currently watching the series on animefreaktv) and I'm only on episode 5 so far, but I can see where I could relate this to something that would happen in Naruto. P.S. If Kakashi dies... I'm going to quit watching...

Posted 7 Years Ago


The dark story

7 Years Ago

hahah.no don't worry.he is not going to die...i mean he will..but then he'll be resurrected immediat.. read more
RachelReaper

7 Years Ago

*sigh of relief*
How the wind and darkness become personified in your poetry... moving in comfort and pain... somehow present in the sorrow of final thoughts.. What an agony in this unfolding canvas...

Posted 7 Years Ago


The dark story

7 Years Ago

thank you so much for your kind reviews

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