Who to follow??

Who to follow??

The more i go away from you

The more close i found you 

The more I say i don't care

The more I cry for you over here

The more I say i hate you

The more I fall in love with you

The more I say you are worthless

The more you seem to be priceless

The more I resist you

The more I crave for you

Mirthful is the fray of mind and heart

Mind tells me to stay apart

but my heart knows...sans you,I am my life's lifeless part!!!!!

Author's Note

please tell me what do you think??

Reviews

[Moniba]

Very nice, Atiba.. Just read it over and make a few grammatical corrections to turn this into an officially beautiful poem.. Mostly we don't mind or point out the grammatical mistakes here much, but in your case, since your writing is very good, i'm pointing it out... Because grammatical mistakes are very distracting..

[The dark story]

yeah sure pls tell me i welcome your views and ifaythg can ake it better...so why should we wait for it...buti cant mae d ammendmnt right now cause y keyboard has ost it senses,that is cearly visile here!!

[The dark story]

lpease tell me my mistakes so that i can make the sorrection!!

[The dark story]

lpease tell me my mistakes so that i can make the sorrection!!

[The dark story]

lpease tell me my mistakes so that i can make the sorrection!!

[Moniba]

I'll mail them to you as soon as I can concentrate on that ;)

[RachelReaper]

I think that the red coloring was a great idea, and yes, I certainly did like this a lot, very nicely done!

[Coyote Poetry]

Old wise saying. "Love and hate is a heart beat apart." Love can twist us up like in the poem and make us content too. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Pax]

smooth flow and sweet end... it has a sad tone to it and the questions of irony makes it stunning...
Great Job

[Muhammad Qasim]

Wow .. great write .. really nice .. i am lost for words .. so true .. the more we run from things the more they follow!!

[The dark story]

thanks for the wonderful review.glad you liked it.though i think it's not that great

[Muhammad Qasim]

hmm . well eVryone have their own taste and i know these kind of things so that might e the reason and if you dont mind i just have to say .. it's unfair of you saying you dont liek what you write .. unfair with the poem that you want to stop supporting such a marvellous piece!!

[The dark story]

awww.don't get angry with me....itjust that im' in a bad mood.that's all.....
pta nhi tum tab kya kahte jab mene ye account close kiya tha.aur resolltuion liya tha ki mein ab kabhi poem nahi likhungi....

[Muhammad Qasim]

you did such a thing .. bus then Abondoning your God given talents and wasting them .. i hate it .. you have the ability to express your thoughts through words then you should do it and not do thoose things .. i would have gotten seriously mad with you!

[The dark story]

oh good heavens .then you would have killed me!!!!11

[Muhammad Qasim]

no no .. i dont do murders

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

great piece :)
lub dis one..

[The dark story]

thanks!!!and tonnes of thanks for being the frist one to review it

[Muhammad Ibraheem]

most welcome :)