The Answer

The Answer

 

Exuberant on the firmament’s bed

The silhouettes of decayed sunlight

The foul breeze wandering like dead

Fizzling malediction on the plight.

 

Embraced in deluge scarlet streams

The san verdant soil, lay repose, stinking

En bloc lay still and silence screams

Save the inhumane flame revelling.

 

He sowed ruinous seeds of sin

Nurtured the heinous thirst’s soul

The savage forest’s killed our kin

Its roots twisting humans’ soul.

 

What were we

and what are we now?

Being evolved from ape

Now are we evolving into another beast’s claw?

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

from stones and sticks to swords and spears, and then to rifles and tanks, and from there to atom and nuclear bomb. sounds so weird that we have "worked hard" so much on making devastating weapons rather than finding a path for a peaceful world.

Reviews

[Pax]

There are many reason why powerful people create such destructive weapons, but i think there are two main reasonable enough reasons for it, one is to protect their matter of interest, second perhaps to protect themselves for the coming of invasion. That's just what i thought, though i don't have real basis on it... your words is a seeker for peace, but on how diverse our culture are... its hard to find the right answer on which is just right or just too much... Many people used abused their power at hand... that is why war history keeps on repeating its bad karma... the news is quite a scare now a days... war is just a door step away into becoming global again... an eye opening piece my friend... well expressed...

[junaid altaf]

exceptional!
well crafted!

[The dark story]

thanks...:)

[dw817]

⊰ℛℛ⊱
Grim poem. It's still not too late for the Venus Project ... or is it ?

[The dark story]

taking a step towards amending things might not work that smoothly if it is a late action. yet it eventually makes things alright in the end. so i guess, no. we still have time.

[dw817]

I think at some point, as Jacque pointed out, there won't be a choice. I hope it comes down to that rather than the chaos I sense will grow for the future ...

[Cassie]

This is interesting, loved the choice of your words..the last stanza got me thinking, mmmhhh so much has changed in humans, and the pics..that kid crying...i wonder why he was crying and the other pic of war scene, I hope that will never happen...Good job Atiba, enjoyed reading this and I see your pen is back haa!!!

[The dark story]

thanks a lot cassie. and yeah it took some time, but i guess i'm back.

[uzair zahid]

A nice write about human behaviour these days

What were we
And what are we now
Being evolved from ape
And now are we evolving into another beasts claw.

[The dark story]

thank you so much for buying your time and reading it.

[uzair zahid]

U a welcome....

[Coyote Poetry]

"Being evolved from ape
Now are we evolving into another beast’s claw?"
I have been studying about history all my life. Man have been fighting forever. Photos gave strength to the poem. World hadn't changed in 5000 years. The bad part today is. Weapons are more dangerous and will kill whole cities in seconds. That should scare us to death. Thank you for the amazing poem. Open the door to a very long conversation with a sad ending.
Coyote

[The dark story]

from stones and sticks to swords and spears, and then to rifles and tanks, and from there to atom and nuclear bomb. sounds so weird that we have "worked hard" so much on making devastating weapons rather than finding a path for a peaceful world.

[The dark story]

thanks you so much for the read.

[Akashi]

Nicely written and very creative...... but do you really believe in evolution?

[The dark story]

thanks. ans ummmm....yeah i do. sounds like you dont.?

[Akashi]

No............: ) ?

[The dark story]

okay so how should i take it...does it mean that you believe in it or does it mean that you don't( why is there a question mark)

[Akashi]

I do not believe in evolution, but I hope you take no offense.

[The dark story]

No wh ywould I ? Everyone jas got their own idiosyncrasy.:)

[Sami Khalil]

A very powerful write on the sad condition of our human history that is full of wars , mayhem , destruction , injustices , arrogance and so forth. I like the powerful ending that says we have evolved into a beast kind of creature. Strong imagery...Pen on...:)

[The dark story]

thank you so much for taking your time and reading it.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Leona Cieri]

Hmm, very interesting concept, though I can't quite grasp it fully. Are you referring to mankind? As the last stanza is the most concert one; however, the abstract feel to the others is rather nice as well. I liked the short descriptions the choice of words seemed to create and the rhymes were pretty good overall.

[The dark story]

yeah i am referring to the twisted games of humans which is ruining peace and the very calm atmosphere of our very home, earth.

thank you for the read and for the upliftment.