Bullet in Head

Bullet in Head

A Poem by Avinash
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A subconscious poem

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You called me for 
forgiveness and repentance
I came down believing 
in some non existent god
Sitting in the black sofa
Staring down at the old carpet
Could not even see
Just heard the sound
It lies right there
for months and for years
can see but wont speak
can't move anything but tears
Now you are the savior as they know
I lost my mind before shooting myself
With pity you look at my face
and then you smile..

© 2014 Avinash


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This one is haunting but sad at the same time...the feeling is intense and undoubtedly great choice of words...and the ending is extremely good and deserving...

Great work again Avinash :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Avinash

5 Years Ago

Thanks Dipanjan
Like a shot through the heart reading this, an ominous piece or work, killer ending, no pun intended!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Good write Avinash......There is something more deep in this poem...

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is haunting Avinash...left me wandering in halls of the unknown, I am glad you pressed that button, does me good x

Posted 6 Years Ago


A excellent use of words and thoughts. It had a sad feel to the poem. Head shots rarely mean happy endings. A strong ending to the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


A very heartfelt piece Avinash.Well penned for sure :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


A haunting write...Thank you for penning...:).................

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Added on January 14, 2014
Last Updated on January 15, 2014
Tags: Bullet, Head, Betrayal

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Avinash
Avinash

Bangalore, Karnataka, India



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