Solitude

Solitude

A Poem by chaotic katie

This stupid girl,

Is learning now,

congratulations,

take a bow,

you drove me to darkness,

but now I know how,

how it hurts to be betrayed,

over and over again,

I’m not going to replay,

This game is not meant for me,

These knives in my back are paralyzing,

But through this pain I see,

Solitude is the best path,

For the scarred heart in me.

© 2013 chaotic katie


Author's Note

chaotic katie
it may not be the best, but I write to vent. Feedback appreciated!

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Giving up and running away from life is cowardice, not strength.

Posted 11 Years Ago


chaotic katie

11 Years Ago

yeah, i was sort of between anger and depression when I wrote this.
SOUL LESS

11 Years Ago

Well, hope you're great now :)
chaotic katie

11 Years Ago

I am! thanks for the feedback!
This is great, you'd make a damn good songwriter. I could imagine this as a set of lyrics in a beautiful song

Posted 11 Years Ago


chaotic katie

11 Years Ago

thanks, i'll work on it!
Well structured write, i liked this poem. It's a capturing power of sentiments. Flow is great.

Posted 11 Years Ago


chaotic katie

11 Years Ago

Thanks :) I appreciate the feedback
Whoa...in my humble opinion this has flashes of brilliance.
Captured emotion from many, yet all in one...I can even say I agree to the premise.

signed, a new fan

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is actually very good, chaotic. Full of untethered, raw emotion and vehement, yet touching, anger...you wear your heart on your proverbial sleeve with this scathing offering.

Venting is good, and doing it through our writing is a fantastic way to drag those inner demons lurking in the dark corners of our minds, and get them out, onto the written page, and expose them for the vile, wicked feelings that they are. That's never a bad thing...

Posted 11 Years Ago


chaotic katie

11 Years Ago

Thanks for the feedback
its a poets job to be hard on yourself, this art takes time before you are truly happy with your work. its your latest so its your best metaphorically its nothing bold but if you re work it and give the reader a different angle of this feeling like a humming bird net or something refreshing and give whoever or whatever your taking about a word your really onto something here, keep at it!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Backstabbers exist so we could learn from them and backstabb others. Is what I think. We do unto others what they have done to us.

Posted 11 Years Ago


I can definitely relate to the betrayal part of this. Cant we all? It hurts and you capture those feelings well.


Posted 11 Years Ago


chaotic katie

11 Years Ago

thanks so much for the feedback
costa siwale

11 Years Ago

Wow! I love your wrathful imagery, just beautiful
chaotic katie

11 Years Ago

thank you for the feedback
This right here is pure, raw emotion. It seethes out of the page. Well done. :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Good vent with strong words. Life can be a stressful experience, I've been there.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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chaotic katie
chaotic katie

Canton, OH



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Greetings darling writers, allow me to explain a bit about myself. I started writing when I was 13 and fell in love with it. Over the years I have won 2 awards for it. I keep most of my old works pos.. more..

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