No title, unfinished

No title, unfinished

A Poem by kasanova
"

Not finished. Reminiscing on someone I cared about.

"

Roses are red, violets are blue

I had nothing to do

So my thoughts ran to you

Well I remember a time

When our bodies would rhyme

© 2011 kasanova


Author's Note

kasanova
Opinions? Comments? Much appreciated.

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I would maybe get rid of the first line, and then continue the poem.

I would write:

Nothing to do
Thoughts began to run to you
An earlier time,
When our bodies would rhyme
.......etc

just an opinion

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This would be a good message for a valentines card ; )

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the poem. Sometime when the mind had free time. Nice to go back to rhyme and good memory. A excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago



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I taught myself how to tie a tie. I write to express my thoughts. I've done things in the past that I'm not proud of, but I believe that the past is just the past. All you can do is learn from it and.. more..

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