get me a one way ticket to Florida for my birthday

i can't tell if distractions aid in the forgetting process or just prolong it.

Please,
tell me about the mangos
and the beaches
and the breeze in between the thighs of your Cuban beauty.
Tell me about the Miami heat,
and the shade you found under the palm trees.

Tell me the stories.
Tell me it all.
Maybe I can turn your audio into a visual.

Take me far away from this place.

Reviews

[Clockwork]

Sometimes I'm not sure either. Lately, I would say that distractions do just prolong the forgetting process, occasionally in painful ways. That's a whole other story. Anyway, I digress. Your title pulled me in right away. I find the idea there pretty catchy. My favorite part of this piece is the first four lines. I think you have good images and a good voice in those lines. I also liked the line later in the poem, "Maybe I can turn your audio into a visual."

[Sage Gabrielle]

"Numbing the pain for a while will make it worse when you finally feel it." -- Albus Dumbledore
read more"Numbing the pain for a while will make it worse when you finally feel it." -- Albus Dumbledore
I suppose, in this sense, the best way is to tackle the problem head on. That's a journey to figure out all by itself, though.

I wasn't expecting such wonderful criticism. Thanks. :)

[Clockwork]

He and Snape are my two favorite characters.

[Kelly A. Brown]

Sad little write. Very good! :)

[Mike Cole]

I love how the lines in your poems can be so short yet also be so effective

[fireblossom]

I chuckled at the direct honesty of this. The breeze in between the thighs of your Cuban beauty etc. Very nice. This touched my heart. Sometimes I long for change.

You write like a musician. I'm a musician first I think. My writing sounds like the the wall and my music is the paint.

All the best Sage...