Why?

Why?

A Poem by malmal412
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this is newer, i wrote this after i lost my best friend on the first day of PSSAs...

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Life, of life

what is the point of life?

Why move on when all you can think about it the past?

Why trust? When its easier to be skeptical ?

Why be childish? When you can be serious? or maybe its the other way around?

Why is life such a roller coaster?

Why can't I have just one good year?

Why have I done to deserve this?

Just tell me where I've gone wrong in my life. . . .

I Just don't know anymore . . . .

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

© 2009 malmal412


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malmal412
sorry its so short

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I write short as well. That is why I have given up on writing books. I use words consicly, poetry is good for that. May I make a suggestion? There are several grammer errors in the piece. They tend to distract from the work. Another powerful emotion filled piece. I read it several times. I enjoyed it, thank you for sharing. Barb.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Short it may be but it is packed with strong negative emotions. There is a sense of hopelessness between every line which leads to a feeling of doubt. But the way, it's interesting how this piece ends. The dots tell there is something more to expect---a continuation. It means that the journey hasn't ended yet.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I write short as well. That is why I have given up on writing books. I use words consicly, poetry is good for that. May I make a suggestion? There are several grammer errors in the piece. They tend to distract from the work. Another powerful emotion filled piece. I read it several times. I enjoyed it, thank you for sharing. Barb.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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my full first name is malorie (also pronounced as mallory) lol, i know my name is weird and unique, and so is the spelling lol my nicknames are: mal, malmal, and i have another, but only a few call.. more..

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A Poem by malmal412