22:19

22:19

A Story by Ban Heo
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This is either a poem or a piece of flash fiction. I'm not quite sure what I want to call it yet.

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22:19

 

-one bed or two

-one bed

-smoking or non-smoking

-whichever one is cheaper

-oh look, there’s candy

-they’re both the same price. Do you smoke

-no I don’t. I’ll take a non-smoking

-it’s going to be sixty-five after tax

-John, look at these pretty rocks. Are these sea salts

 

The tips of his nails are black

They’re too long for construction work

 

No car out front

 

 She’s dirty and can’t stand still

116

 

-is it going to be cash or credit

-do we need to put down a deposit

 

Destruction of property

 

-I’m sorry, all we have is smoking tonight

109

 

-that’s a pretty sign up there

-what’s that say

 

-it’s a verse from the bible

-it’ll take me a while to read it for you


I can’t read Korean very well anymore

I can’t read Korean

I can’t read

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-that’s fine                    -that’s too bad, it’s really pretty

-sixty-five please

 

He hands me three twenties and a five

They feel wet, but I know they’re dry

 

Everyone’s money smells the same

But these bills smell a lot more like money

He never answered my question

I hand him the key

 

-it’s going to be the last room on the outside facing 711

 

-have a good night

 

-can I take a candy

-yes you may

 

-have a good night

© 2013 Ban Heo


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I have to admit even though it might not have been formatted like a poem I still liked it.

Posted 5 Years Ago


More of a piece of flash fiction than a poem haha. It has no real rhythm.

I enjoyed it though, not sure why there aren't any reviews yet.

Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 8 Years Ago



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