Moonbeam Ridge

Moonbeam Ridge

A Poem by barleygirl
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inspired by Robert ("bad bunny") . . .

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Loftiest apex in the Santa Cruz summits
ancient one snapped a hundred acres cheap
graced her primitive post Moonbeam Ridge
and camped in remote wilds for thirty years.

Luna steadily hammered hodge-podge corrals
for breeding twenty-some horses and llamas
but a tempestuous filly, sans shelter was she.

Of six sisters only a few were never tamed.
Sis and I bumped and clattered a rustic way
up to Moonbeam for Luna’s sacred celebrations
a refreshing version of UN-Hallmark holidays
drumming under plump Grandmother Moon
food roasting all day over coals underground.

The party pops as darkness descends
a muffled indigo horizon is backlit by
smoldering suggestion of moonbeams.
Far below the sprawling city is frothy,
gradually growing, a peppered pink glow.

Dew drop galaxies with sparkling cobwebs
shimmering strands of tinsel span the bay
pin pricks fizzle to pencil a blackberry shore
far below the Bay Bridge twinkles a mere hint
as San Francisco Peninsula surges into night.

Distant coyotes howl to encourage the moon:
illuminate our skittering rodent hors d'oeuvres!
Horses huff and hooves scuff the crunchy loam
while clucking llamas resemble amplified quail.

Gazing the brisk star spray of a country night
sometimes when I close my eyes so tight
I catch the twinkling of Luna’s dew drop galaxies
from our long-ago perch up on Moonbeam Ridge.

© 2019 barleygirl


Author's Note

barleygirl
I lifted the phrase "dew drop galaxies" from Robert Trakofler's poem
"Inductive Reason" (oooops! no plagiarism rants please!)
https://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Flaccidbunny/2124342/

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If the result of plagiarism is this I would be glad to send you a copy of everything I have ever written! Vivid is the spectrum of your palate you draw with words so lovely. Your ink daubs emotion so sincere in the images you pen. To say that I am flattered that anything i could scrawl could evoke this sort of response is well we haven't created a word to give justice my gratitude I treasure this

Posted 11 Months Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

11 Months Ago

During the "honeymoon period" (when we are so pleased with something we've just penned), I kept comi.. read more



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What a lovely picture, like a Avatar scene with wild horses.

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

6 Months Ago

I forgot about writing this (happens all the time!) Thanks for reminding me & complimenting too! (((.. read more
This is full of overwhelming imagery. It rolls along rather well and takes you on a magnificent journey as if you were right along perched on your shoulder. Splendid! Great work , Margie! CD

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

After a lifetime of technical writing, I tend to be a bit terse with my descriptions, so I really tr.. read more
I love how we travel up the ridge for a panoramic feast.
Thanks for the trail ride.


Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

Thank YOU for such a sweet review! It was my pleasure to go back in time! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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DAH
"Dew drop galaxies with sparkling cobwebs
shimmering strands of tinsel span the bay
pin pricks fizzle to pencil a blackberry shore
far below the Bay Bridge twinkles a mere hint
as San Francisco Peninsula surges into night"

... that I live in Berkeley gives me the right to
relate to this on a deeply personal level, and I do!

The mysticism in this piece drew me in and played with my spirit ...

Bravo,
DAH

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

10 Months Ago

I just have periodic mine subsidence here:) :/ kinda makes sense huh!
DAH

10 Months Ago

three pennies make a few cents ... you and I make two sense ... when it sinks, jump in!
Robert Trakofler (Bad Bunny)

10 Months Ago

lol I get my bathing cap
What a view and what a celebration of sight and sound. As you perch high in writing skills, the viewer can see better and better, clearer and clearer the wonderful things you see and experience. Your hints twinkle like little stars at the horizon of poetry. Animals add to the natural beauty of the surroundings.

Posted 10 Months Ago


"The party pops as darkness descends
a muffled indigo horizon is backlit by
smoldering suggestion of moonbeams.
Far below the sprawling city is frothy,
gradually growing, a peppered pink glow."

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

The ultimate compliment is when a reviewer quotes something that I kinda loved myself! *wink! wink!*.. read more
Sami Khalil

10 Months Ago

You surely did. You are welcome dear Margie.
What a lovely rhyming portrayal of your time spent under the open sky Margie. Sleeping under the night sky is a great day to reconnect and recharge. Some of your refs are a bit tough for me but your love for your place shines through.
I've just been watching the film of Woodstock. So much hope for something better and look where we are now!
Chefers.
alan

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

It tugs at my heart when friends complain about my colloquial word choices, a complaint I get often .. read more
alanwgraham

10 Months Ago

It is good to talk about these things Margie. You did help me when I started here to consider my col.. read more
This is just so beautiful. I love how you use your vocabulary. It's amazing.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

I love looking thru many word possibilities as I edit my poems, so your compliment really hits my he.. read more
It's not plagiarism if you give credit . . . and I do like the phrase. Nice poem here Margie. Guess I'll read Bunny's poem.
T

Posted 10 Months Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

I tend to envy other writers their clever turns of phrase! Thanks for sharing & understanding why I .. read more
the language fairly zings along at a gallop, with some great turns of phrase, you paint a vivid picture, Margie,

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

10 Months Ago

Thanks for your very encouraging review! It feels like the ole poetry wheels can get rusty so quickl.. read more

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