She'd Rather Be

She'd Rather Be

A Poem by barleygirl
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autobiographical . . .

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Guess she’d rather be in Escondido
where a gleam of crescent moon smiles
stealthy sentinels rise from rock piles
hiding out from reckless crocodiles
as piquant traces pique her wily libido.

Guess she’d rather be in wild environs
where warm bubbles fuel her soul flame
upsurges sustain this tempestuous dame
no longer stifled by the collective shame
never again to be tethered in mood irons.

Guess she’d rather be in wild Ventana
where noble oaks don mossy dresses
fluid dolphin draft caresses
wild wonders intrigue all poetesses
the chaparral snaps with fragrant manna.

Guess she’d rather do her essence solo
though many feel as if they’ve met her
and one torn man can never forget her
still almost nobody ever really gets her
as she drifts away on a mystic rainbow.

© 2019 barleygirl


Author's Note

barleygirl
Photo: Arroyo Seco river, about 2 miles from where I live
(NOT the Arroyo Seco in southern California).

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she would rather be with herself...at this point...if nobody gets her, then being alone seems the best..Emily Dickinson was reclusive for mostly the same reasons....her friends couldn't keep up with her, didn't get her...
she was better off in her autonomy....she ruled her own world...as you do yours, and with such elegance of language.
j.

Posted 3 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

This review is so startling, I realized I had not yet had my first cup of coffee this morning, thus .. read more



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dearest Margie... the longer you live... it is more difficult
to connect with people. You do not want to disturb their soul.
and ruffle their feathers. So you are content to study the wild
and learn to find peace with your own feelings and experience.
I wear feathers in my hair and study the birds. truly, Pat

Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

You have taught me to use birds to make my point in more interesting ways. Here's a passage from my .. read more
Wonderfully written dear Margie. I really loved the language and the feminine touch of the poem. I also liked the way you started lines with "guess" and the use of - mystic rainbow, fragrant manna, wild ventana and many others. So in short I absolutely loved and enjoyed reading it.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Thank you for an enthusiastic & thoughtful review! Maybe the feminine aspect was pumped up since we .. read more
No-one could quite reach her, could they? Some thought they did, which is only disheartening in the end. Or perhaps she feels like she never really found her tribe. Aloof, on her own page, but as a dear loved one often tells me - 'I'm in my own world, it's okay, they know me there'.

Her own page/world is colourful and vivid. Sounds like a far better place to be.
With warmest wishes to you Margie, I enjoyed this so much.
Laura


Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

"I'm in my own world" is kinda like my theme song. I sent you a private msg to illustrate! Love this.. read more
The message is clear be yourself and not a chameleon or someone else to appease others while sacrificing yourself.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

I was so immersed in my own ideas, I never thought to consider this in a wider context! I love your .. read more
Who knows us better than ourselves. Just saying that, actually, I realize a lot of times people share insights about me that I hadn’t recognized. My greatest insight about myself is that I like to daydream more than is healthy. And therefore miss what’s right in front of me.

But your reflections here offer such depth of self understanding. I love this, Margie. Your confidence and self-knowledge are inspiring. And your independent spirit is something I also admire about you. Here, crafted among the moon and trees.

The wildness and invoking of the beautiful surrounding landscape is such a nice touch as it lends us a sense of the inner spirit too.

Such rich images. Stones oaks to get lost in, and come out the other side clothed in discovery. This is a lovely poem.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

All my life, among lots of people, making a living, etc . . . I always dreamed of living like I now .. read more
"Still almost nobody ever really gets her... as she drifts away on a mystic rainbow"... the perfect last two lines to an "autobiographical" poem. Your poem reminds us that we reveal more than we write, and sometimes our attempts to conceal our quirks actually reveal them, and sometimes in splendid poetry and art.

Margie, I'm always impressed how you use so many different literary devices in your poems. So many seem light and humorous, yet we see a serious dedication to your work. This is no exception. One of my recent favorites for sure.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

This is a review that tweaks my tootsies! I think this calls for another cup of coffee, since I didn.. read more
R.E. Ray

3 Months Ago

Enjoy that cup, Margie. Put a little good Kentucky bourbon in it, too. :)
barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Given my sweet tooth, it's gotta be a splash of Baileys Irish Creme!
Those that have, give looksof pity, but will never fully understand the freedom of being yourself, never having to play anothers tune. I am so glad i am tone deaf and detest other peoples noise. Nor will they ever understand walking into a room, asking yourself what you came in for and answering yourself "why you asking me, you already know i dont bloody know", then laughing uncontrollably at yourself
Oh, its just me then? 😀

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Growing up with an overbearing family (the youngest of 9), there were many imposing their opinions o.. read more
This poem is amazing. The rhyme scheme is fantastic. This is a lovely piece of self reveling artwork. I really enjoyed this poem. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Thank you for a great review. I don't remember seeing you here, so I'll go check you out (((HUGS))) .. read more
The Awesome One

3 Months Ago

You are vey welcome.
Cleverly constructed with a flow of rhythm and rhyme that works like a charm. Your fruitful brain has pulled another corker out of the hat (not sure about the metaphor lol)... and having been in foreign parts recently I know how good it is to be in your own place - even if, in my case, encumbered about by people.

There is a rich fragrance in the pictures you paint, with their evocative images and sense of other experiences, other worlds... and yet for all your versatility, there is that sense of contentment, of being at home in your own skin, whatever the lure of other worlds. I am so glad you are not tethered in any kind of irons. I can't imagine it... they would either melt or snap... and nobody can tether the rainbow, despite the pot of gold. 🎈

Posted 3 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

Being at home in my own skin . . . that's the ultimate compliment & something I've been missing most.. read more
she would rather be with herself...at this point...if nobody gets her, then being alone seems the best..Emily Dickinson was reclusive for mostly the same reasons....her friends couldn't keep up with her, didn't get her...
she was better off in her autonomy....she ruled her own world...as you do yours, and with such elegance of language.
j.

Posted 3 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Months Ago

This review is so startling, I realized I had not yet had my first cup of coffee this morning, thus .. read more

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