Yearning

Yearning

A Poem by barleygirl
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gazing upon ebony limbs clawing ivory sky . . .

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I was yearning to see
but branches snarled my scene

I was listening
until noise shredded the harmony

I would breathe
but greed suffocates freedom

I was yearning to taste
but my tongue got knotted

I tried meditating
but a din rattled my repose

I almost smiled
but truth stifled hope

I was ready to fly
but then my courage stalled

I tried dancing
but agony throttled my limbs

I yearn to sing
but titanium strangles my cords

I used to play
until the swing spanked my spunk

I would feel
but cynicism clogs my channels

I long to live
but then life yokes the yearning

© 2020 barleygirl


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Sweetly explained how life isn't that sweet to live!
You, I, all go through at least one of these hindrances while exploring our best interests in life.
Many of my long coveted desires got mixed into cesspool due to the obstacles that I don't deserve.
Thanks for speaking out calmly. Love and hugs💜

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Amen sista! (your desires got mixed . . . obstacles you don't deserve) . . . I hardly ever write any.. read more
Tahsin.Z🍁

5 Months Ago

I do and know that happiness is always extracted from your funny writes!🌹



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Ok girl I'm bestowing on you my magic wand of eternal blessings. Whoa!

love,
al

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Love this! Thanks for stopping by! I've been gone awhile so I'm catching up & I'll check out your po.. read more
I don't think you're very good at being sad. You should try harder. "Real" poets are cynical, brooding embrace the void whilst holding a rusty blade sorts... I'm kidding of course, but seriously- there is such an undercurrent of amusement in this that I imagine an irritated child- quick to forgive and forget whose having a hard time remembering why she was sad in the first place but trying really damned hard to capture the fleeing memory just the same. All we get is snips and snaps. I heartily enjoyed reading this.

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

This is the ultimate review! Thank you so much for that. I love not being like other people. I've sp.. read more
wow..This is extremely beautiful my dear, I feel every emotion of it

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Thank you for digging up an "oldie" -- I completely forget what I wrote more than a week ago! I've b.. read more
I like how this begins, Margie. When the mood is a bit dark, it seems like the nature that surrounds us takes on a similar hue or character.

The dual nature of being human can be difficult at the best of times, but when it begins to weigh a little heavier, that darkness can permeate every corner.

I think it’s healthy to explore those darker moments and tones from time to time. We are not just light or dark but a melding of both. For me, your poem speaks to both sides. There is the current trial, but the goodness is also remembered.

I really enjoyed this.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Some readers saw this as dark, some thought it funny, which is something I very much enjoyed. And yo.. read more

Just for the record... I love this more each time I read it... and I loved it first time round...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Thank you for the million dollars, do you need a receipt? *wink! wink!* The best thing about this po.. read more
Neville

5 Months Ago

If there was only one way, we would pretty soon get fed up... I like a bit of variety too .. we are .. read more
I loved reading these captivating couplets. I especially like these...(I used to play until the swing spanked my spunk) That just gave me a huge chuckle! Thank you. ~Sharon

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

I love that you see the humor in this. Many readers thought I must be writing a bleak one for a chan.. read more
Margie, I truly enjoyed the structure and flow of this poem. It reeks of adulthood, the shackles of society and its demands to conform. We become so beaten down as we grow up that we lose our spirit and smile. I think we get smaller as we age. It's not so much the years that kill us but how we live (or don't) our lives. So much truth in this poem!

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Love your new profile pic & I also love how you inject new meaning into my poem . . . I rarely attac.. read more
R.E. Ray

5 Months Ago

Thank you, Margie. I think you have much to say. I often see deeper threads in your work, even whe.. read more
You in a maudling mood, visions of afteryears hitting you for six.
Hate it when swinging spanks your spunk. Usually, go to the doc with that, but I know he'll tell me it's a virus. Sometimes you just need a bloody good rant, mad sex, or just kick the crap out of some politician. Just don't get them mixed up, that's an arrestable offense.

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

A nice impeachment would've eased some of the angst in this country, but alas, the overwhelming medi.. read more
Paul Bell

5 Months Ago

No chance of Trumpy getting impeached, pigs would fly first.
For me, Margie, this is your poem I like the most. I like it's style, spare and repeated. I like it very much. And not your usual rhyming on steroids. You could pare it back by removing the the's and the thens. it would accentuate the repetition even more. What do you think? I'm also not sure about titanium?? Do you use it to mean strength? How about nerves strangle?
You've got some great phrases in there and it's accessible. To be honest Margie I sometimes hesitate to review 'great poetry' because I've no clue what it's about and I don't want to make up some fancy twaddle.
No twaddle here!
All the best.
Alan






Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

5 Months Ago

Titanium refers to my neck rods, which keep me from being able to sing, literally! I did struggle wi.. read more
alanwgraham

5 Months Ago

Titanium - ouch! You do great not grumbling more. I go over and over my writing agonising over word.. read more

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