No Plowing

No Plowing

A Poem by barleygirl
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haiku clustering . . .

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No plowing this sky
sun buried to the axle
in dour dirt-clod clouds.

Furrow goes unplowed
tiller tilted toward trouble
horse ain’t hankerin’.

Can’t plow this drainage
fertile fields of yesteryear
choked by sky-high weeds.

No plowing this row
headway shirked the heavy hoe
fields have gone fallow.

Drought sticks in the craw
sawdust pie with sticker crust
when did we last plow?

© 2020 barleygirl


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perhaps before corona ends us then we should be able to access the memory itself - when did we last plow? was it yesterday? was it the day before? alas! how are we ever going to find out when such an event had occurred or not. I love this, so premodially vintage, somewhat, I enjoy the sound of it

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

"Premodially vintage" . . . wow! I can't decide whether to thank you or kick you in the a*s! *wink! .. read more
iceintheattic

3 Weeks Ago

hahahahha! Margie, both if you wish! - and I didnt mean it in ancient way , but in a sense, it give.. read more



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Ahhh, the life lessons shared in these few lines. Well written - and relevant to how life goes sometimes. Suddenly you look back on your life and wonder when you last tended your "life garden." When did I last pray? When did I last call my family? When did I last clear my clutter from my house and my life? When did I last practice the arts of my hobbies? Very poignant!

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

This is a great interpretation of my poem. With today's world being in strife, many times people (in.. read more
Sounds like the drought
from hell that ravished
the land.. barren and
deprived of care needed
and all that's left are
memories of its flourishing
days..

reminds me of scarlet
o hara. Gone with the wind
when she retured to Tara
and found it destroyed and
she vowed to restore it to
Its original state

Great write here Margie


Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

I totally love your "Gone With the Wind' reference! To me, that's the funnest part of sharing here a.. read more
  Fran Marie

3 Weeks Ago

you re so vey welcome😄
sounds like a euphemism, Margie, that unplowed furrow thing, lol, liked the haiku style

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

You might be the only person who saw my original intent for the word "plowing" . . . I never heard i.. read more
Love this Margie
I have never read haiku clustering before this is brilliant

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

I used to write short poems, but nowadays, I've always got more to say than a little ole haiku allow.. read more
Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)

3 Weeks Ago

Lol sounds good I may try it
Nothing worse than droughts that last year after year - nothing is fertile or able to grow except for those damn weeds - need some serious irrigation there (and perhaps a mule instead of that unhankerin’ horse) :))

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

We are getting some much-needed late rains, but it's still been a pretty dry winter! We've had 2 wet.. read more
I tried writing haiku years ago but fell flat. The opening here is a grabber and hooked me into reading more. You have a talent for words and how they're combined to make an interesting read. The second stanza might be my favorite.

Great Haiku, Margie.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

My early haiku was more like a snafu . . . I appreciate your kind encouragement which makes me smile.. read more
Great Haiku Margie; to me this feel like the speaker is visiting on old family farm that has been left fallow; Knowing that there is nothing to be done with it, but re-live the memories of what it once was. Your strong language with deep thought in it, makes this an excellent poem; an excellent Haiku in perfect form! Love it!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

The "old family farm" idea is a new one that nobody else mentioned & I hadn't thought of. That's wha.. read more
Margie, all compliments on the haiku. It appears you've mastered the form. Not surprising. In keeping with the rural/farm scene, I'd say this is the farmer's favorite hen (I dare not say "chick") who is past her prime laying years but hasn't lost nature's eye or drive. It seems she knows it, and rather than roosting in self-pity, she owns it. She might even strut with the roosters to say, "Yeah, what's your problem?" Another enjoyable read, Margie.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

Are you suggesting that I'm a fat old hens that hasn't laid anything in years (be that eggs or the o.. read more
R.E. Ray

3 Weeks Ago

I’m full of theories, Margie. Mostly wrong ones. :) Always happy to read your work.
Looks like a bit of formality where your extensive vocabulary is a definite asset
All finely rhymed but I have to confess, I missed the message
Not too surprising
I basically took it as a reference to the current global concern
Crazy me



Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

This poem has many meanings & you can pick the one that hits you! I watched a movie the night prior .. read more
Dave Brown

3 Weeks Ago

Yes, water is a concern, I have heard that one of the very top financial advisors has been purchasin.. read more
Seems to be making a statement about the weather....lack of rain perhaps as is happening in many parts of the world....its that Mexican lout El Nino up to his cunning tricks again! We can't plow without the ideal conditions for our crop to flourish anew....a metaphor that can be applied to many areas of life. I enjoyed the clustering of the form and the continuous flow of theme throughout them. Much enjoyed! :))

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


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barleygirl

3 Weeks Ago

I think we need to retire "el nino" . . . he doesn't do what he used to do (bring steady rain) . . ... read more

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