Exodus Odyssey

Exodus Odyssey

A Poem by barleygirl
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Meg = me (fires in CA) . . . Annie = Annette Pisano-Higley (hurricanes in FL)

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West Coast Meg is crispy smokin’
nearby flames sizzlin’ her backstrap
Annie Croakly is due for a soakin’
nearby seas a briny frothy frappe.

Placing bong-phone to mouth
Meg buzzes alligator-lizard-lovin’
sisterfriend in a glug down south:
specters say we best be movin’.

Lengthy swill from an elixir bottle
Annie boards her chitty-bitty chopper
soars into wildfire’s lifeless mottle
to whisk Meg on an orbital whopper.

First oddity to catch their notice
a limitless exodus of birds trailing
each a fluttering lavender lotus
to adorn aqua clouds while sailing.

Before reaching mindless galaxies
but after passing some noxious gas
swashbuckled by milky manatees
mowing seven lightyears of grass.

Annie arm-wrestles a carefree curve
to let Meg straddle a popcorn comet
while in awe of her sisterfriend’s nerve
she pilots this jaunt and strokes a sonnet.

Overlooked dogs come smokin’ a hooter
stardusting their forgetful lollygagglers
rev the asteroid thrusting their scooter:
forget our old blonde hippie stragglers!

© 2020 barleygirl


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That's a whole brand of words I'm getting to hear after a long time. Your game of incorporating words in your poetry is very strong. This exotic, extravagant, flabbergasting fiasco of adjectives adds to the surrealism of the whole experience. The poem starts with a contrast of calamities, you're in fire, your best friend is in water. But the feelings are resonant and the escape you describe meant so much to both of you, that the narrator spins this carefully embedded yarn of words and rhyme. This all makes perfect sense and justifies how an escape with someone you love means so much to the poem's writer. there' I was hooked, I felt the emotions, invested myself into the descriptions, felt like a third sitting behind you two in this escape.

Thanks for sharing

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barleygirl

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You are so expressive & effusive when you review, it feels like you "get me" even deeper than I got .. read more
Akshay Rawal

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Pleasure's mine! :)



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You've been reading Dave Brown too much.

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

I used to think Dave Brown had the most outlandish imagination & I longed to emulate this aspect of .. read more
This is so creative. News and weather in a poetic form with seriousness and mild humor mixed in one. Your imagery and word choices are amazing but fitting for your style in stylishness. It is saddening to see all storms hitting at one time different parts of the country.

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barleygirl

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Not to take away from this good time we were having in this poem, but I just found out we are close .. read more
Sami Khalil

1 Week Ago

Wow. Amazing. You are welcome.
:) you guys are like a Thelma and louise minus the car off the cliff
Fun read!

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Love that movie! Watch it every so often! Thanks for a great compliment! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
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Popcorn. Comet.
OMG.
This. Is. Amazing.
The whole thing, I mean. Not just that one phrase.
But that phrase absolutely killed me.
Reads something like Thelonius Monk with words. Jazzy and unexpected.
Always dropping to a D when you expect an F to be played.

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barleygirl

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I love it when you catch one of my own faves! The last 2 lines of this review really jumpstart my da.. read more
Dripping Chocolate Madness

1 Week Ago

Lololol that just made my month. Maybe my entire year. If I can recommend a driving tune:
My .. read more
barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Nice spin *smile*
mother nature has sure gone crazy. great word crafting that captures the bizarre situations taking place. all the way here on the opposite coast, we've got a haze from smoke particles trapped about 10,000 ft. up. too bad there wasn't a way to send all that lousiana/florida rain to california to douse the fires.

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

Don't get me started!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Pete

1 Week Ago

where's smokey the bear when we need him ... :)
I LOVE OUR POEM SO MUCH SISTERFRIEND!!!! Margie I'm so thrilled with this sweet "flight of fancy"! "West Coast Meg" and "Annie Croakly" flying high with birds over lavender lotuses and aqua clouds... Alligator Lizards rock and I can just see our pups passing us on their stardust scooters! You got us soaring, rhyming and carefree on an epic orbital whopper- what a way to evacuate our mutual environmental onslaught! I don't know how you write such dreamy stuff filled with colorful imagery, on-point metaphors, Buoyant and exciting psychedelia and sisterfriend-swagger, but I love it and you!! Wish I was one toke over the line too, but your poems actually take me higher and higher. smiling big like everything's alright now.. will def save and frame this one to read and read again. Thank you so much Margie and so glad to join you in Hipster Haven! Hi to L and P- arf! xo, me.

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barleygirl

1 Week Ago

I imbibed great quantities of homegrown to come to this level of fun! *wink! wink!* I love that you .. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

1 Week Ago

HAAAAAA! SO YEEEEEEESSSSS!! Up, up and away.....XOXO, me
That's a whole brand of words I'm getting to hear after a long time. Your game of incorporating words in your poetry is very strong. This exotic, extravagant, flabbergasting fiasco of adjectives adds to the surrealism of the whole experience. The poem starts with a contrast of calamities, you're in fire, your best friend is in water. But the feelings are resonant and the escape you describe meant so much to both of you, that the narrator spins this carefully embedded yarn of words and rhyme. This all makes perfect sense and justifies how an escape with someone you love means so much to the poem's writer. there' I was hooked, I felt the emotions, invested myself into the descriptions, felt like a third sitting behind you two in this escape.

Thanks for sharing

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Week Ago

You are so expressive & effusive when you review, it feels like you "get me" even deeper than I got .. read more
Akshay Rawal

1 Week Ago

Pleasure's mine! :)

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