Pigeon Pedigree

Pigeon Pedigree

A Poem by barleygirl
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pigeons swoop from tree to tree nearby . . .

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Jousting wings from tree to tree
flapping chevrons blurred filagree
gulping tiny cherries along a marquis
improvised landings flow feathery
gather into a cottonwood goatee
branch bumping squawkers disagree
pigeon premonition in hyperbole
wings blast off into a boiling sea
feather-swept chaparral scenery
plumage plunges pen ecstasy
dripping ink begs to set us free
streaked by tincture of trinity
ruffle swooping a bank of scree
pollen pump leads to pigeon glee
insisting upon their delight decree
an irresistible invite to you and me.

© 2020 barleygirl


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some of the imagery in this make me think of a collision of nature and unfortunate ruination of it.
Chevron makes me think of the oil company...the inky sea...i think of oil spills, and pigeons with blackened wings weighed down, falling into the well...
the pigeon glee short circuited...
maybe we can save them and those like them, but taking more care with the environment.
j.


Posted 1 Month Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Your interpretation is a few thousand miles from anything I had been thinking while writing this & I.. read more
jacob erin-cilberto

1 Month Ago

My dad was an engineer for Texaco for 35 years...
Just a "few thousand miles"?
well I .. read more



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The imagery in this is amazing, and really carries the mind away! It's just very beautiful, and a very free feeling to read. The rhyming and wording really all fits together so well.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Living in the wilderness I watch pigeons paint the trees like brush strokes, but most who read this .. read more
Colacat

1 Month Ago

Pigeons get so much hate, but they're birds like any other, and are another beautiful part of nature.. read more
Exotic writing and imagery, your writing always spurs the fervent reader to keep their vocabulary beyond equipped. The countryside and sceneries you witnessed and grew up with served as a priceless shelf of creativity and artistic splendour that you have been stocking and displaying with your poetic passion. Metaphorically speaking, you are adept at adding a plethora of exotic spices and flavours to your dish, all while still keeping it simple, basic and healthy. Cheers and warm regards to you and the pigeons. By the way, what do you refer to by "trinity"?


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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

To answer your "trinity" question first, I do not intend to impart any particular meaning to such a .. read more
Archishman Rick

1 Month Ago

Of course, Ms. Margie. Understand or not, people appreciate and relish it. Pour out at your heart's .. read more
it is fun to watch pigeons swoop, change directions as one, land then take off together as though choreographed by some dance studio... I would watch them while sitting on a bench at Madison Square Park in NYC... I saw what a mess they made as well.. they are very messy birds and so I too read the poem in two ways, like Jacob seeing the way we damage the world we live in... love the poem Margie...

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barleygirl

1 Month Ago

You are the first of 9 reviews who express enjoyment at watching pigeons! (Which is what I would've .. read more
I like the wording of this poem. The Rhyming kept me engaged to the end. Enjoyed the read. It was fun. Tyfs

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

To be honest, I wuz just bee-boppin' along, not really knowing where I wuz going, just enjoying the .. read more
I adore all of your poems because of your word choices. My favorite line I would say is ruffle swooping a bank of scree". I do have one recommendation for future poems of yours. Having exotic words is always a must-need essential for poetry. Although, teher is such a thing as too much exotic vocabulary. Sadly, 99% of readers don't have time to search up every word in a poem to try to figure out what it means. I recommend trying to limit these words to 2-5 in a poem. If you need help, ask someone younger than you to read it and see if they understand it. Remember: Poetry isn't about how unique your words are, it is about if you can speak to your reader through your words. You can't speak to them if they don't understand it. -Kay

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

I agree that your premise is one that many might adopt becuz most writers strive for mass appeal, bu.. read more
Kay/Hayden

1 Month Ago

Thank you for showing me your perspectives. I guess we have very different perspectives on writing. .. read more
barleygirl

1 Month Ago

I wrote many bad reviews at first, filled with my assumptions about life, about writing, about write.. read more
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Gee
We call upper management pigeons and class ourselves as statues. Their job then is to fly in, s**t on us, then f**k off leaving us to sort out the mess left behind.
More tongue twisting wordsmithery :)
Good afternoon dear, hope all is well with you

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

It's such a delight to be dive-bombed with your s****y jaded point of view, my friend, becuz now I d.. read more
Gee

1 Month Ago

I could quite easily ditch mankind for dogkind :))
Reminds me of the times of walking on the boardwalk in Atlantic City and they would be strutting around. Keeping you distracted while the seagulls, hovering just overhead, are waiting for the chance to swoop down and steal that hotdog right off your bun.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

You should write that into a longer poem, Dave. Take your time (you only take your time when you're .. read more
Dave

1 Month Ago

Margie - okay - I'll give it a shot. Lots of hugs back to you - Dave
Pigeons, although not preferred among many, should still get a pat on the back; but I see more in this poem, like nature is disintegrating, “ boiling sea” makes me think something terrible is going on...like we are cooped up ( in many ways) and need to be set free ( meaning us) from this terrible burden we are carrying..you mention the pen.. as though we are not free to write, again cooped up in this autocracy... ps I may be crazy!!!
Xo B

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

barleygirl

1 Month Ago

This is amazing! You & Jacob are the 2 poets that read my poem in this dark way & I can't help menti.. read more
Betty Hermelee

1 Month Ago

Hey Margie If you think i comment the way Jacob does, that’s a compliment to me!!!( ha ha)....by t.. read more
barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Being compared to Jacob in ANYTHING is the highest degree of compliment for all of us!
We have no pigeons here in my yard. I do see the winged hobos who walk between the parked cars at the grocery store scavenging for the errant potato chip. I am not a fan. But, I do have a great many doves that strut beneath my bird feeder and graze on the wasted seed spoiled from the trays by greedy cardinals and finches. I like the sound they make when flushed; it belies their dignity, makes them less regal somehow.

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barleygirl

1 Month Ago

Thank you for the breadth & flapping awesomeness of your share. This is the best part of posting at .. read more
Not a pigeon lover normally, you make them sound quite inviting until they start misbehaving. Not a fan of squawkers. Pigeons are so clumsy and then all that pigeon poop. Yours must be nicer, or maybe you are more tolerant than I am of this species of avian irritation Margie. Whatever.you have penned a fine poem here. All good wishes from across the pond.

Chris



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barleygirl

1 Month Ago

When I looked for a photo to go with my poem, all I get are these ugly shots of s****y bird messes o.. read more

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