What If...

What If...

A Poem by barricade
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just my thoughts...

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What if???

what if i could just say what i wanted to...
without any pondering or further ado...
what if you could just hear the unspoken...
the words unsaid within the heart that's broken...
what if we hadn't made the mistakes we did...
would we still be apart, stranded....
what if we could turn back time...
would you run into my arms and still be mine...
what if my love wasn't this strong...
would yours alone have held us so long...
what if in the next moment i said I'll die...
would you want to hold me or even say goodbye...
what if God offered me a chance...
would we have our one last dance...
to see my love in one last glimpse...
hold you tight and kiss those lips...
after this I'd love to die...
at least we shared our last goodbye...

© 2009 barricade


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These are some very hard What ifs... heartbreaking to read.. Your ink drips the blood of your regrets .. I am so sorry you are hurting.. I read it in much of what you write but pain and suffering often what molds a good poet.. I am so glad you share your feelings with us... thank you, Rose

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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A lot of pondering here... The human mind gets lost in thoughts easily. Is it always fruitful?

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How I love the rhyming. This is well done, life is full of questions and bad moments, we should just learn to enjoy what we have. Thank you for sharing this nice piece

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Smoothly flowed to an end.
Beautiful.

Keep exercising your talent.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

These are some very hard What ifs... heartbreaking to read.. Your ink drips the blood of your regrets .. I am so sorry you are hurting.. I read it in much of what you write but pain and suffering often what molds a good poet.. I am so glad you share your feelings with us... thank you, Rose

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This has a nice flow to it, we all have those moments when we question ourselves what if. Again this flowed very smoothly with your words and how it went to each line.

Good Job

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was so painful to read.. not the type of what if's one likes to have.. and most don't admit it but have at least one what if in life! I could really feel your emotions pouring out in this.. this is real feeling .. embrace that you have had that moment and memory.. I am no longer fighting the "what if's" and understanding that they do exist.. moving forward to allow the future "can be"s".. to happen at the whim of fate. Those last nights.. last kisses.. last dances.. so devastating to reach out for them.. for we all know inside ourselves we want more deep down than that when we feel that way! Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very heartfelt write here.
Such emotion, wonderfully written and expressed.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a great poem.
Touching. Emotional. So open heart & genuine emotion.
Really wonderfully written.
Just a typo in this line:
"would you even to hold me or even say goodbye... " - I think you want to take "even" out of it?
Anyways, keep up the great work.

Yours truly,
cloud6

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Congrats! my friend, for your win ~Most Heartfelt in the Heart contest :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Congratulations for winning the Heartbreak-Hotel contest!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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