The war within....

The war within....

A Poem by barricade

There's a war waging within me

that threatens to devour my whole...

Lead to a drastic transformation

or just leave me with this soul...


It's a battle between the furious two...

One is who I was

and the other my alter ego...

Just the somebody I am

versus what I might change into...


The outcome decides my fate, my future

and just what I'm gonna be...

The selfless, loving heart that I was

or an evil, dark, gruesome creature!!!


It's the battle between my heart and mind...

and my patience is being tortured!!!

It's ego pitted against love once more...

The trecherous war, truly one of a kind!!!

 

It's a war waging within me

threatening to devour my whole!!!!

© 2009 barricade


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barricade
ehh....

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great job! i know i have written MANY poems like this. about the battle between good and evil. this "war" in side of yoursleves. read "detainee." so I had background knowledge before reading this wonderfully penned piece. I like your style, it appeals to me. however, maybe too many uses of the exclamation mark? i usually don't even use it at all. but overall, amazing. truly.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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its really weird, because, sometimes i feel the same way. Great job expressing that feeling!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have been reading your works and I am really touched at how real and moving they are. I envision everything you say with a great perception brought about my the emotion that your words stir.
Very talented writer, my friend.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

And the battle continues. Great piece. This battle happens between our heart which is our feelings and our mind which is our knowledge. Most times its a fight to the finish. I really enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for the read request.

Live, Love and Learn

Lady V

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This, I love. It relates to me in so many ways, it's almost scary. lololol! But excellent job. The flow was smooth - nothing about this seemed forced simply because of it's soulfulness. Excellent work. It's definitely going in my favorites.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can literally feel the battle within these words. Good vs. evil, right vs. wrong, light vs. dark.......it's always there.......somewhere in the back of everyone's mind. This is definitely a poem I can relate to. Very soulful.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I don't even know what to say about this one. I did absolutely loved it! Your words spoke to me and I have the same war in my head. Thanks so much for this write. I look forward to reading more of your work.

The High Poet

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

the battle between who you are and who you will be/who you were. I think we all face this battle and it's very difficult. It can torture the soul. but what we need to remember is it's our actions that define who we are. Feeling like a good person means little if we don't portray it in action. It's a conscious effort and a choice made to be whoever you choose to be. I've learned this. Very relatable. I enjoyed this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ah...!! great job..!!you expressed it well..!! well our heart and mind do goes in different direction..and there is a fight going on within us about what is right or wrong? and evil wins at many times...
thanks for sharing..!!
great write..!!^_^



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nicely done hun

Posted 11 Years Ago


a battle that ruins everything in and around you...well written my friend...this battle is the root cause for all turmoils...i loved the read...thanks for sharing it...

love,
krishna

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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