Avocado

Avocado

A Poem by Pollai

You sad dismal Avocado you

Forged,

Through the chains of an insidious bicycle

Hidden,

Lugubriously like an algebra equation

Precarious,

Up in that tree house

Run,

Be free like an innuendo

© 2013 Pollai


Author's Note

Pollai
Something I wrote during an exercise for a creative writing course I'm taking this term, this was supposed to be a "bad poem" using 10 random words; I thought it's worth a share. Enjoy!

We had to use as many of these words as possible:

Sad
Insidious
Dismal
Avocado
Bicycle
Lugubrious
Algebra
Precarious
Tree house
Innuendo

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P...I gave it a try, too, just for the hell of it. It was indeed fun...enjoyed it. For me the point of exercises like this are simply to make new connections between words. That's probably why it can easily be funny....humour can be described as making strange connections after all.

One final point, if by 'bad poem' was meant incomprehensible or opaque...it achieved its objective. But like the other reviewer said, 'At least it's kind of funny.' Thanx...bobc

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pollai

7 Years Ago

Haha, I think I will start a competition with this.
bobc

7 Years Ago

Please do...I have one already prepared.
Pollai

7 Years Ago

http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/Creative-Bad-Poetry/48943/ :)



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There's something so magical about nonsensical poems that makes them...make sense. Nice use of the words given.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love avocados

the writ is very mysterious despite being an exercise

Posted 7 Years Ago


How sad is this insidious, dismal night/ Sky the colour of avacado/ Moon lke a lugubrious bicycle/ Stars make pointless algebra equations/ Precarious dark covers my tree house with innuendo.

Posted 7 Years Ago


its a great little nonesense poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Dye
How fun and impressive that you could spin something out of those words while talking about an avocado. I really like the use of "innuendo" in the last line.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Pollai

7 Years Ago

Thank you Dye :), it was fun to write
I kinda feel bad for the sad avocado... perhaps if it runs fast and far, it will meet up with just the right spring roll... ;)

It looks like you had fun with this exercise, Pollai!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pollai

7 Years Ago

That I did, haha thank you Rita
sounds sexy
otherwise I like avocados
in salads and guacamole and other dips
so this is allowed
for my appreciation
otherwise you did a well done poem
needs mint tea though
YOU forgot the mint tea!!!
HAI!!!


Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not so bad, the last line is killer, now if you could make some guacamole that'd be even better.

Posted 7 Years Ago


A touching and quite fun piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ahahaha! they are a bit lugubrious aren't they?!! Run avocado, runnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn!
E.

Posted 7 Years Ago


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