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written to the tune to Don MacLaine's "Vincent", which was playing in the background as I read it to the "student poets" after I admitted to a girl who had had a meltdown' that I understood her anger

 Dreaming every night

Feeling tired, moods are grey

Look out on a summer’s day

We see the hopeless pockets in your poems.

 

Wishes on your wall

Why could you not have it all?

A childhood you all deserved

With teddy bears to make a house your home.

 

Now, I realize what you asked me to see

How you wanted a bit of normalcy

And let the pain and anger free.

I would not listen, I cannot say why.

Now, I promise I will try.

 

Staring at the walls

A room not where you want to be

You fill your voids with poetry

L

 

Locked up far too long, falling leaves then winter snow

But when will it be your time to go?

And know that you are not the one to blame

For your anger, hurt, suffering and shame.

 

 

Now, I realize what you asked me to see

How you wanted a bit of normalcy

And let the pain and anger free.

I would not listen, I cannot say why.

Now, I promise I will try.

Tell your hurt to those who really care

And if you speak up for what’s unfair

Open doors will lead to a loving world.

 

And, don’t smudge your face in coal

For the times you lost control

‘Cause at times I too feel grey

But I’ve learned a better way.

 

Setting goals will be a must

Just be careful whom you trust

We all deserve a voice

And if they say, “You have no choice.”

Smile and walk away.

 

Dreaming every night

Of a world that’s perfect just for you

With skies that will be brightest blue

 

Your kindness and warmth I never will forget

I’m so happy that we met.

 

The tearful eyes on tear filled cheek

Coming from a life too bleak

Will dry up and joy will take that place.

 

Now, I realize what you asked me to see

How you wanted a bit of normalcy

And let the pain and anger free.

I would not listen, I cannot say why.

Now, I promise I will try.

Author's Note

Please, honest feedback, and how may I read your pieces/

Reviews

[Kent Rawski]

This poem has good rhyme the theme is consistent it flows pretty well a lot of insightful passages with emotion

[Kent Rawski]

It seems a poem of when life does'nt fit reality but to be a hand to hold onto until this too shall pass a friend in need is a friend in deed

[bayla]

I need a constructive review not a comment. hat did you honestly think?I will read one of yours tomorrow. I promise.

[Nat Wells]

This song fits really well to the tune of the song you mentioned in your description. I like the rhyming scheme and the beat. However, you have a stray L about 4 stanzas in.

[bayla]

thanks. I shall fix my typo tomorrow. do you think it has any promise? Tomorrow, I will read another of yours. It is the message about which I am most concerned.