Who am I again?

Who am I again?

A Poem by .::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.
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I'm not sure who I am or who I'm supposed to be.

"
 

Who am I?

Every time I think I have it figured out,

I get lost in the fact that I'm only one small person,

In this sea of people better than me.

 

Who am I?

As I look at you & shout!

I open my eyes & see there's really no one,

Around me to hear what I said.

 

I notice all my flaws,

The way I can't spell or do the math,

The way I forget to do what I'm supposed to.

The way I get nervous & forget to wave back.

 

I'm a big mistake with no cause.

This time it doesn't help to take a bubble bath,

Because when I get out I still don't feel relieved.

It seems it's everything I need that I lack.

 

This world is cruel,

They look down on me,

For dropping out,

I couldn't help it I was afraid to fail.

I couldn't help it,

I had to bail.

 

Every time I think I have myself figured out,

I have to ask,

"Who am I again?".

 

Here again I'm getting ready to shout,

But no one can hear through my mask,

Of betrayal & sin.

Who Am I Again?

 

Can you help me?

Don't leave me here alone...

Again.

© 2008 .::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.


Author's Note

.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.
It's not perfect but I like it.

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Yes, I like this =)
I like the Who Am I? running all the way through, gives me something to focus on and you bring the poem back to it cleverly and with ease each time.
I like "This time it doesn't help to take a bubble bath", that's very witty, maybe you should try putting some of that wryness into your poetry more, because I always love it when someone treats a serious subject with a bit of humour and irony, it makes me feel closer to the writer somehow and stops it straying into self pity.
It's still a bit like a list at points, but again there's still a lot of very genuine emotion there which carries it through.

Posted 12 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Sorry it took so long to review this. This is definetly something that has crossed my own mind every once in a while. Great write!

Posted 9 Years Ago


You are beautiful and so is this poem......a great display of vulnerability...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Really nicely done hun :) I can relate to this plenty. I go thru this almost everyday. I dont even know who i am most of the time. I just know that i try to do good, and i try to do my best in things. I feel lost as well. I sometimes have to stop and take a time out every now and then to find out what my life's worth, and how should i fix it, or just end it all, u kno? It's so very hard for me. Loved the poem. Very beautiful :)

B.A.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This poem is really good.... I like the begining about being in a sea of people.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i like this one because it's not like the other poems i've read of yours thus far (maybe i haven't read enough yet though). you broke your mold and set up different. still a rhyme scheme but not abab. i love what it's about. great job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was a great poem. It was very clever and witty. You have a talent. Keep writing! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a wonderful poem. You bring it full circle, you completely expose everything about yourself that most people would try to hide in making themselves feel or look better. But that just makes you a person that's one step ahead in knowing who and what you really are. In thinking "Who am I?" you are learning the answer to that very question. And this poem has a great flow to it, so kudos and kisses!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It is perfect the way it is, you show just how most of us feel from time to time... always questioning what we have done and where do we want to go now and at all ages in life... a Very well thought out piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful, deep write! The questions reach so far inside, driving you down for the answers and the hope that you won't have to find the answers by yourself. Powerful!

Craig

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Fear not my young friend ...we are human and not meant to be perfect. Your poem says something that, I think, all have gone through at one point or another in life. There are many lines that i personaly can relate to and many others can as well. I liked this as is. there were no mistakes that I could see. Good job .

Mr. Lopez

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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My Name is Rebekah but everyone calls me Beck or Beckah or my fav Cup^E^Cake & I was born in Ohio but Raised in the south. My poems are about things that really happend some where in my life weather .. more..

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