The Music Box

The Music Box

A Poem by R.G. Bennet
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A story-telling poem that tells the tale of a beloved queen and her fate.

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Walking along the streets
You hear a curious sound
You search until you've found the source
Intrigued by what you've found --
A tiny golden music box
Sitting on the ground

Appeared from nowhere 
it seemed to have done
Curious, curious
As would be to anyone
In puzzlement you wonder
and wonder yourself stiff
The thing you fail to realize
Is the long hidden myth
This music box - yes this same box
Belonged to Meredith. 

Ruled she did some centuries past
Beloved queen of Murrowfast
Graceful swan, gentle dove
This queen specialized in love
And what is more, in English lore
Young romance most did Meredith adore
Alas! The tale does not go on
Poor Meredith passed away one dawn
No one knows why
But for story's sake
They put it down to true heartbreak
Perhaps love itself was too much to take

That golden box there in your hand
I'll say this once, so understand
Is Meredith's surviving wish/command
The music box, her most prized possession
Appears to those with deep depression
True love the box will bring
Love such that the heart will sing
Once touched, a spell unfolds
Love at last! Joy untold!

Poor Meredith, a secret hid
Covered up the truth she did
See, Meredith so full of passion
and love that made the heart to burn
Never had a special gent
 To give her that love in return


And that is why her music box
Is found among the sad
To give its finders a shot at true love
The one thing Meredith never had

© 2012 R.G. Bennet


Author's Note

R.G. Bennet
I'm not really used to writing poems, so am a bit rusty on format.

Is the rhyming tacky? Or does it fit?

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DA
I know this is someone's else review, but it tells exactly how I feel about this poem:

"I really like this poem, it has a good feel to it, and gives me an interesting vivid picture in my mind of past melding with the future. I like the idea of the sadness of this queen and the heart break that could have been bestowed on her. I also like the idea of the music box, it seems enchanting. I like your rhyming technique, I thought it all went very well together. "

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DA
I know this is someone's else review, but it tells exactly how I feel about this poem:

"I really like this poem, it has a good feel to it, and gives me an interesting vivid picture in my mind of past melding with the future. I like the idea of the sadness of this queen and the heart break that could have been bestowed on her. I also like the idea of the music box, it seems enchanting. I like your rhyming technique, I thought it all went very well together. "

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very far from tacky, it whirls and twirls. sounds like a bards tale. perfect.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really like this poem, it has a good feel to it, and gives me an interesting vivid picture in my mind of past melding with the future. I like the idea of the sadness of this queen and the heart break that could have been bestowed on her. I also like the idea of the music box, it seems enchanting. I like your rhyming technique, I thought it all went very well together.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

THIS IS GOING IN MY FAVORITES!!!
Loved this. I love the way you unfolded a story, which kind of just took me back in time, in a sophisticated, funny, un-talked era where people owned music boxes and mourned over lost love hahha. The effect is amazing, I can still feel the chills linger after I read the last line. The rhyming is perfect, it was so nice to read. I also love the language, and this blend of words 'from the centuries past'. This is such a great story told in a beautiful way. Keep writing!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I'm not one for reading poetry but I really enjoyed this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Well written poem with a good story, good write.

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Beautiful poem! It's not tacky at all, quite the opposite frankly! Wonderful write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tacky! Why would you think that? It's perfect! I love it when poems tell fictional stories!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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A bit rusty? You must be kidding me! This is absolutely splendid! :) The rhyming just made the poem altogether more lovely! I was enthralled by your ability to narrate a story in rhyme.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I thought the rhyme scheme made it flow very nicely. I love the fact that this poem reads a little bit like a self-reverie, and is a narrative as well.

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Tags: Meredith, queen, love, heart, sad, music box

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R.G. Bennet
R.G. Bennet

DFW, TX



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