My angel of darkness

Inspired by the movie "Phantom of the opera". Really loved it :)

The night slowly sneaks up on me.

The moon and shining stars are the only things I can see.

The shadows around me, I feel them nearing,

A creature approaches, it's the one that I am fearing.

The creature walks through the silent night.

It grazes me lightly, as if to give me a fright.

But then it returns to the shadows from which it came

And begins his little dance all over again.

I feel I know this being, but I cannot see his face.

And somehow his presence brings my thoughts to scarlet lace.

The feeling so familiar, and so I don't shiver in fear,

Because the words he's now saying sound so very sincere.

"For so many years I have waited in the dark.

I was alone and abandoned, with a burdening mark.

But my soul knew you were out there somewhere,

So I searched for you hopelessly in despair."

I stood there watching him and I felt his pain.

And I knew that I should help him, even if they called me insane.

This creature was no creature, he was just a wounded man.

But before I did anything, within a blink he ran.

So I was left there baffled, his voice still in my mind.

I did not know what to do, but there was one thing I could find.

Although he reeked of danger, a feeling I couldn't suppress -

The feeling that he is my phantom, my angel of darkness.

Author's Note

This poem gave me quite some trouble and I know it's not exactly the best thing I've written, but bare with me please. Reviews would be very much appreciated, thank you. :)

Reviews

[Jack...]

LSD, I like the feel of this poem. You have told a story and told it well. If I was to criticize anything I would just say, beware of forced rhymes. Some seem to be that way. But otherwise the poem is very good and has a special feel to it. I hope this helps.

[LadySoDivine]

Yes it does, thank you, Jack. :) I was worried about the rhymes too, but I really had no idea what to do about it, so I left it as it is. Thank you again for the review!

[Jack...]

I think you are doing very well and I love reading what you bring. I am watching you evolve into a brilliant poetess and I am so happy to be your friend.

[LadySoDivine]

Thank you so much, Jack! Your kind words really mean a lot to me. :) Really, you have given me such support since I joined writerscafe and I am truly honored to be recognized by a great poet such as yourself.

[sonceotrok]

i got the chills reading ya
but i got the thrills too hearing ya
but i love the frills you wear on your dress
i wanna say ur preety..but how to..
super-godz im such a mess:))

[LadySoDivine]

Um, thank you, I guess? xD

[sonceotrok]

u guessed right yeah cherrylips

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow! dark tone and powerful piece, love the progression and the words expressed in this saga of angel of darkness, truly a brilliant write, enjoy reading this piece.

[LadySoDivine]

Thank you very much :)

[Danilo Ašanin / ..]

Aman vise "Teodora",prekini da pises ovoliko dobre pesme. Smuci mi se vise da ti dajem stotke. XD Svidja mi se to sto ti pesma tako puno podseca na E.A.Poa. :) Sve lepo i tako to. :))

[LadySoDivine]

Sve lepo i tako to xD I ne zovi me tako -.- Hvala puno za sve ostalo :3