Falling leaf

haiku

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Falling leaf

 

 

With autumn colours

I’m falling from this dead tree

To live once again

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Syllabus count: 5-7-5

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I welcome all sorts of suggestions on it� As such I guess the ending is nice! But starting line isn�t going well with it�
What�s your take? :D



(Special thanks to Caffeine for her help :) )

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

Dear Bhavya, This is a great haiku. I have read many haikus till date and this is one of the bests in them. I loved the last line the most which symbolizes that there is always a new beginning after an end, which is really very inspiring. Literally also it is just perfect with the syllabus count and presentation is outstanding like always. Great job Bhavya and I'm looking forward for you to write more beautiful haikus like this

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Beautifully written! Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Justin Tobey]

Beautiful job! This might be your first haiku, but it creates vivid, Autumn imagery that captivates the reader. I think your choice of font and font colors also contributes to the breathtaking descriptions. Great write! :D

[Stella]

Nice haiku. I like it. Keep up the good work! :)

[Emily B]

This is lovely. I'm no hand with fixed forms but I had a thought:

With autumn colours [maybe a word that is more colorful to describe the leaves, maybe brilliant?]

I'm falling from this dead tree

To live once again

Again, Lovely!

[Forest Green]

Excellent...what a great picture too.

Thanks for the send...;)

Nice work...!

[TamiViolet]

Again, darkness leads to light. It seems as though we are thinking along the same line these days, honey. I love this! Your English spelling of 'colours' adds a classy touch. Message is so profound... Exceptional in thought and layout!

XXX

[Together]

I'm really very sorry Bhavya but I don't know what a haiku is , so I can't give you any suggestions for it.
But as a poem too this is very deep and conveying such a lovely meaning.

[Blue Rose]

I have written quite few haikus and frankly speaking this may be your fist haiku but still it is better than all the haikus I have written, The syllabus count is just perfect and the reference of autumn is imparting the feel of haiku in it.

[Roxy]

I don't have too much knowledge about haiku, but I know about the syllabus count 5-7-5 and I agree with other reviews that it is one of the best 5-7-5 I have ever read.

[Golden]

Sorry dude, I don't know about it. But Iam sure of one thing that there is a lot of depth in your words, very well penned.