Falling leaf

haiku

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Falling leaf

 

 

With autumn colours

I’m falling from this dead tree

To live once again

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Syllabus count: 5-7-5

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I welcome all sorts of suggestions on it� As such I guess the ending is nice! But starting line isn�t going well with it�
What�s your take? :D



(Special thanks to Caffeine for her help :) )

Reviews

[!!..Love..!!]

Dear Bhavya, This is a great haiku. I have read many haikus till date and this is one of the bests in them. I loved the last line the most which symbolizes that there is always a new beginning after an end, which is really very inspiring. Literally also it is just perfect with the syllabus count and presentation is outstanding like always. Great job Bhavya and I'm looking forward for you to write more beautiful haikus like this

[Imperfection]

Well then, this is final.

Successful experiment, I must say.
I'm so glad you chose to post it.

I must admit that I came to this page for the reviews more than the Haiku!!

Good going. Hoping to see many more 5-7-5's from you. And why only Haiku's, I would suggest you experiment with other forms as well.

[Innocent]

Unlike my fellow friend Love, I liked the first line the most (With autumn colors)
Every season has it's own meaning in every haiku and you have depicted the feel of autumn so very well in this haiku.
Autumn as far as I know brings to mind a very wide range of ideas: decay, belief in the supernatural, jealousy, saying good-bye, loss, regret and mystery to name a few. Falling leaves, shadows and autumn colors are the most common implementations. This is very professional Bhavya and I really now advice you to start taking writing seriously as a profession and I'm sure you'll be so successful in that field because you have that substance and potential which is so higher than your age.

[Blackbeats]

Dude! This is awesome...Keep writing like this.

[angelina neves]

wonderful!

[October]

I really like it.
It's better than a lot of haikus I've read.

Well done.

[Dani California]

Your first? Wow..
braaaaaaaaaaavo! :)
What else can one say to this?
It's wonderful, Bhavya...

Nice work!

[Brianna Brie]

Most breathtaking 5-7-5 I have ever read. Deep and profound, seasonal and all the right syllables...Perfect as it stands!