You

You

A Poem by bhavya
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You are so much more all the time.

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You are as calm as the night sky,
bestowing your serene warmth in a cold night,
with blemishes of honor and resentment in your body, like stars accompanying the sky.
And when it rains, the thunder you bolt out is your beauty magnified.
And every time I call  out your name,
I want you to know, the universe stands still, to feel the aura your name spreads in. 

© 2015 bhavya


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bhavya
I'd be glad to know how you feel on it :)

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I am thank ful to each one of you here taking the time to review this poem. Extremely Sorry that I am not being able to reply to your reviews since I am using a phone which doesnt show me the option to reply reviews. But am glad and would love to be reviewd further and also appreciate to make the necessary changes and write better . Thank you.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Very nice poem, it leads me to serenity.

Posted 3 Years Ago


And every time I call out your name,
I want you to know, the universe stands still, to feel the aura your name spreads in.

It is warmth and so beautiful.
I love you use of word.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WoW!!!
beautiful.............
though i agree with Allen...........the length of lines are.........awkward........
very well written.........
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


I am thank ful to each one of you here taking the time to review this poem. Extremely Sorry that I am not being able to reply to your reviews since I am using a phone which doesnt show me the option to reply reviews. But am glad and would love to be reviewd further and also appreciate to make the necessary changes and write better . Thank you.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The imagery you've used is wonderful! Great poem.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautifully captured. Your words sing from the page.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

such perfect use of imagery...beautiful...and romantic....nice....

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was beautiful and romantic.
Written straight from your heart. I hope if it goes out to anyone in particular, that you have read it to them.
I really enjoyed reading this, was such a sweet piece.
Keep writing, always :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice write bbhavya, imagery and use of metaphors was well done as was
your near/slant rhyming. Form and style was free flowing and spirited.
Two minor points...I might not use "sky" twice and the last line was awkward...(I would definitely work on "Spreads in"... maybe as little as dripping "in". Should never end a sentence with a preposition anyway.
Other than that...terrific poem
allen

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice use of description. You create beautiful place and left the reader with good thoughts. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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