alone

alone

A Poem by bhavya

A fiery soul like a candle , craved love,to burn.
To burn is to live,
Betraying the barriers of her own dignity,
She played out her heart to be scrutinized .
Being just a ray of light in the darkness ,
She was lit , and kept aside, as she lit and melted away,
The sun came and it was another day.
Candle which lives the days defined by the sun,
Has a place of her own, but was willingly left by,
every time the sun shone.

Today, She defines her chivalry, cruelly.
Everytime you light her for the company of your dark nights and no moon light,
She's far gone, invisible to your sight,but
You will burn another candle tonight.

© 2015 bhavya


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bhavya
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The feeling of loneliness rings true in your words, emphasised wonderfully by the way "you light her"...to burn is to live. The ability of the candle to burn by herself, after being left for alone so many times, is both a blessing and a bane, albeit to different parties. Your writing appeals to me!

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bhavya

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Means a lot.



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Very unique way of descibing loneliness..... i felt the emptiness and emotion...great piece.

Posted 4 Years Ago


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bhavya

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much Hebe :)
It's very poignant! It's the kind of thing, which never let's one sleep! Awesome!

Posted 4 Years Ago


bhavya

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much! :)
Loneliness= Solitude
Solitude= Emptiness
Emptiness= Greed
Greed= Depression
Depression= Sadness
Sadness= Loneliness

You have expressed it well by using vivid words. Well penned Bhavya

Posted 5 Years Ago


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The feeling of loneliness rings true in your words, emphasised wonderfully by the way "you light her"...to burn is to live. The ability of the candle to burn by herself, after being left for alone so many times, is both a blessing and a bane, albeit to different parties. Your writing appeals to me!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

bhavya

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much. Means a lot.
A powerful poem. Had to be read a few time.Your words telling story of light and the darkness. I like the tone and honest feel of the words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


bhavya

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much.:)
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

You are welcome.
its not just direct. A little complex i would say and thats why i like it.keep it up ,you have it in you

Posted 5 Years Ago


bhavya

5 Years Ago

You have it in you** I'm blessed to get such an.appreciation... Thank you so much
Nicely done. I like the concept of having a fire to burn to light your darkness, only for it to be discarded, unwanted when the sun shines. And as the candle burns it's last, its final thoughts being there will be another candle to take my place. I really enjoyed this.

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bhavya

5 Years Ago

Thank you so much.. :)
alifeacoustic

5 Years Ago

You're welcome :-)

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