Stunning Scene

A love poem depicting a "beauty" and a "beast". The question most of us probably have from time to time wondering if we are good enough, or just enough, for the ones we yearn for; desire. Sonnet form stretched to 13 sylables per line.

Quietly I peer through boughs of aromatic pine,

And gaze down upon your divine moonlit silhouette.

Nape of your neck enveloped by amber locks so fine,

Very sight makes my heart dance a splendid minuet.

 

Your feminine beauty quite breathtaking to behold,

Lights the fire inside me that I just can’t control.

Goddess like curves fill my body with urges truth told,

Desire to hold you I would almost sell my soul.

 

The sparkles from the flowing river you stare into,

Dance marvelous jigs in your eyes and on your sweet form.

What do you dream about, staring into waters blue?

Handsome man of your dreams to keep you so close and warm?

 

If only I could be the man of your yearning dreams,

But I am so flawed, so I just watch this stunning scene.

 

 

Author's Note

I hope you like it.

Reviews

[Erotic Goddess]

Your feminine beauty quite breathtaking to behold,
Lights the fire inside me that I just can't control.
Goddess like curves fill my body with urges truth told,
Desire to hold you I would almost sell my soul.

This is beautiful and you have used a stunning form to convey the longing so well. I really enjoyed reading this piece, imagining the beauty that he sees, the desire that he feels to be the one that she desires. Great job.

xxoxx

[Kerry]

This piece is dreamy and eloquent. Simply lovely. The only caveat: the font makes it difficult to read. Sorry - that is the graphic designer/web developer in me coming through. Love the write though. Excellent!

[THE LOST ROSE]

I think this poem is fantastic. Very visual and thought provoking. A poem that readers think about hours later. I hope you send out some read requests? I plan to of this poem.

[Honeypot]

Yep, I do like it. I think sometimes sonnets aren't the most smooth poems, but I think this one does flow nicely. Its got a different touch to it. Its almost delicate in its wording and tells a great story of the beast watching the woman by the water. Its got a sad quality to it, but its also whimsical. I think you did an awesome job with this. One of your bests for sure.

[Poeticpiers]

I did like it The sonnet form is infinitely flexible but thirteen syllables is definitely unusuak