Brown eyes

Just another poem about the beauty of eyes

 

Those brown eyes

So deep and mysterious,

Lit by the embers

And licking flames from the fire.

 

Upon closing them on me in shame,

I am stripped of my clothing,

Left bare in a cold, solitary,

Dark, dank, and torturous room,

Lit only by your eyes; but dark now.

Heavy and still I lay, knocked to the floor

As if all energy and life

Was drained from my body through

The rip in the center of my heart.

Cold and alone life seems meaningless.

 

Then, as if magically touched

By the keepers of warmth and light,

Your eyes open once again to me,

Allowing me to gaze deeper within,

Beautiful, lovely brown eyes,

I see the light of the fires

Of love and passion glowing inside,

Warmth floods over my nakedness,

Lifting me up and light as a feather,

Lifted by your love and magical brown eyes,

As if the hands of God reached out of them,

Embracing my heart with loving touch,

Lifting me up to you, forever.

Reviews

[Robert Haigh]

A good write, in praise of beautiful eyes.

[Alice Oiseau]

Eyes are the doors to the soul. Undeniably expressive and honest. I love how you capture that Mike. I really like this. Keep up the writing!

[~amanda~]

what amazing and vivid imagery! you definitely have a way with words. great job!

[Honeypot]

You know my eyes light for you, right?

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Great tribute to the eyes.. they truly are the gateways to the soul. Here you have the feeling of being shut out .. by those beautiful eyes.. the soul turning on you.. to a build of everlasting warmth.. being lifted in writing and the literal bright colour of both the format and words themselves flashing across the screen being brought to life.

I could feel a real warmth and also genuine emotion running through this piece. It was creative and flowing with life. The rhythm and flow I liked very much. The feeling is something that I rate very well penned.. this was brilliantly done!

[StoryTailor]

Hmm... Pretty. It grabbed me by the shoulders and sucked me into it's words. I'm still trying to find my way out. I like this. I really and truely do. I wish I could say more but, what else can I say?

[Poeticpiers]

A beautifully written tribute to those brown eyes Expressed in poetic prose without the slightest ambiguity

I am sure she for whom it was written will be as impressed as i was

[Honeypot]

This was really lovely! Really. Its like a roller coaster ride. You start kind of high and sensuous and plunge into dispare and then back up again. The use of color really accentuated the piece. This part was especially nice:

Then, as if magically touchedBy the keepers of warmth and light,Your eyes open once again to me,Allowing me to gaze deeper within,Beautiful, lovely brown eyes,

This was really beautiful and full of such an array for emotion. For somebody who says he's not a poet you do pretty darn good!