Daffodil Heaven

Daffodil Heaven

A Poem by Brenda Sue
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Mostly written while sitting in the recovery room with my little girl after she had had minor surgery. She giggled as I recited some of the lines to her.

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Fairies sprinkling magic fairy dust knee-deep
Waking the daffodils from a long winters sleep
Beautiful daffodils of yellow, gold, and white,
Opening up and smiling for the world's delight

Fairies and daffodils dancing with the daisies
Creating sweet dreams for all the little babies
Looking for Easter eggs, bunnies and butterflies
Celebrating Springtime with such a surprise

Fairies opening our eyes to this our heirloom
Magic in the air as the flowers begin to bloom
Glorious trees encircled by daffodils and daisies
Rain and wind whispering sweet little praisies

Fairies sprinkling magic fairy dust around like a maven
Spreading love and joy of a daffodil haven

 

 

© 2008 Brenda Sue


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This is just delightful and leaves the reader with a lighter spirit, and that is always a good thing. I thought the rhyme was very creative. I also admire the vivid imagery portrayed here. What I would call lovely sensory descriptions that bring this poem alive with "daffodils dancing with daisies" Just lovely. My favorite lines were:

"Fairies and daffodils dancing with the daisies
Creating sweet dreams for all the little babies
Looking for Easter eggs, bunnies and butterflies
Celebrating Springtime with such a surprise"

I suppose it isn't hard to guess that I was born in April and have always loved daffodils and springtime. This poem resonated with me and I truly enjoyed reading it.


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How very sweet! I love daffodils, too. There's something so encouraging about seeing them stick their heads up after a long winter. Your little girl must have really loved this poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is just delightful and leaves the reader with a lighter spirit, and that is always a good thing. I thought the rhyme was very creative. I also admire the vivid imagery portrayed here. What I would call lovely sensory descriptions that bring this poem alive with "daffodils dancing with daisies" Just lovely. My favorite lines were:

"Fairies and daffodils dancing with the daisies
Creating sweet dreams for all the little babies
Looking for Easter eggs, bunnies and butterflies
Celebrating Springtime with such a surprise"

I suppose it isn't hard to guess that I was born in April and have always loved daffodils and springtime. This poem resonated with me and I truly enjoyed reading it.


Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was such wonderful fun to read. And I really loved this stanza...

Fairies opening our eyes to this our heirloom
Magic in the air as the flowers begin to bloom
Glorious trees encircled by daffodils and daisies
Rain and wind whispering sweet little praisies



Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The daffodils have already bloomed here and what a delight, as is your wonderful poem. Whimsical, light hearted, and fun-Brenda! Thanks for sharing. You must bring your daughter much joy!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This is really beautiful. I can see why your daughter was smiling..So inviting-especially at winter's end! I have little daffodils peeking up-I can almost see the fairies though today they had to take the day off because it snowed -ugh-
As for the review part my only critique is that you broke from your rhythm here:"Glorious trees encircled by daffodils and daisies, The rain and wind whispering sweet little stories...Your word choice is excellent but it doesn't rhyme like the rest. (Daisies is a difficult word to rhyme with). So After much thought the only suggestion I have would require poetic license eg.,: The rain and wind whispering sweet little "praisies" -the beauty of poetic license- it does fit in this fantasy -(for those who don't believe)poem. Feel free to disregard it of course-only a suggestion-I couldn't think of a different word to rhyme here..You do amaze me with your excellent word choices and your talented gift of rhyme.
The last two lines also break rhythm as you know :"Fairies sprinkling magic fairy dust around this Haven
Spreading love and joy of a Fairies' Daffodil Heaven"- how about this as a suggestion:"Fairies sprinkling magic fairy dust around like a maven, Spreading love and joy of a Fairies Daffodil Haven..maven means an expert in their field-I think fairies qualify-Again, Your Poem is very well written and the rhythm flows well overall-a delightful read! Thanks for sharing it with us..

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is lovely. Most poetry I have found so far on this sight is either dark or full of strong emotions, I really like this lighthearted happy poem. May we all find our Daffodil Heaven.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Meant to say i am glad your daughter had minor surgery and liked the poem..
Chloe
xoxo

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love this - fantastic piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


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This was a lovely spring poem; I could imagine the fairies and flowers in it! I hope your daughter is doing well.

-Nicole

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a delightful and extremely well written spring poem! This is filled will all the good things that come with the season! I'm sure your daughter loved it, what a nice present.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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