Jack Wears Black

Jack Wears Black

A Poem by Brenda Sue
"

For a contest, my first try at limerick.

"

 

There once was a fellow named Jack

 

Who dressed from head to toe in black

 

Bleach fell in the wash strong

 

Making Jack sing his song

"Dye me jeans, Dye me shirts, Mrs. Mac"

© 2008 Brenda Sue


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light and fun....great job with your first limerick.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Catchy, funny and light-hearted! A really nice piece, one that's thoroughly enjoyable. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really enjoyed this piece.

jkb

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How catchy and humorous! I really liked the rhythm altogether, even though I do have a small suggestion.

Maybe you should reword "In the wash fell bleach strong." For some reason, it doesn't sound right and the flows kind of stumbles right here.

But besides that, I really enjoyed this limerick and this is really good for a first try.

Thanks for sharing. And congrats on winning the contest by the way!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How retro. Very clever. Reminds me of my ex doing my clothes.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

How playful, I smiled as I read it. So much fun!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LOL.. Jack is no longer all in black.. very fun to read..

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

heh very playful, and a fun limerick

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Catchy little rhyme. Could possibly be a new age nursery rhyme. : ) Made me smile!!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one made me smile Bren - cute!! Excellent first try I must say!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on March 22, 2008
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Brenda Sue
Brenda Sue

Chatsworth, GA



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