A Poem by Moth Phoenix

It's another version of something I had to do for creative writing.


She casts such a thin shadow,

behind the eyes of those around her.

She speaks loudly what she wants to say,

but it only comes out a whisper. 

She's like that one last ember to die,

hanging on to life more than ever. 

She cries but no one sees,

she laughs but no one cares.

The full moons in her eyes are now waning,

while she's stuck fading.

She knew she'd have to face this horrible fate,

to see her one true mate. 

"I've looked for thee and now you're here" 

"I have come for you my dear" 

the words she longs to hear,

tangled in the web of life,

through the stars of the universe. 

Such a lonely girl she stands,

casting such a thin shadow.

She longs to take in ones true grin,

but hides like the little chameleon. 

© 2013 Moth Phoenix

Author's Note

Moth Phoenix
I would like to say that those who have read and reviewed, and liked this poem, thank you! When I presented this in class, absolutely no one liked it. It means a lot :)

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well crafted poem...but one question I had was why it would be a horrible fate to see her one true mate?

"I've looked for thee and now you're here"
"I have come for you my dear"
the words she longs to hear,
tangled in the web of life,

this feels like wonderful longing...not a terribly feared outcome...

She seems like a wallflower...unnoticed...inconspicuous...blends into the background like a chameleon...yet she's longing for her one true love...resigned to worship from afar to use an old cliche...

I would suggest having us feel unrequited longing instead of consummate dread or insecurity...which I do feel...if this is your intent, then the poem works for me...

Posted 9 Years Ago

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she doesn't seems like she trust herself at all....
more like she doesn't recognize who she is./....

Posted 9 Years Ago

I really liked this. You had great metaphors ("She's like that one last ember to die") and great description. ("The full moons in her eyes are now waning") I, too, was confused as to where the chameleon aspect of the poem, from the title, was going to come in to play. But i see now, from that wodnerful ending, that it fit perfectly into the poem and moved smoothly with the words. good job :)

xoxo Caitlyn xoxo

Posted 9 Years Ago

When I started reading it, i was confused, confused about where the chameleon on the title would be coming... But at the end after the last 2 lines, i became a proud reader, proud to be reading such a work... I read it once more and this tym i absorbed the max.. Nice work...

Posted 9 Years Ago

To cool and I love how you make it seem the woman is kinda like death lurking for her pray lol. But you know feeling lost so that you blend in with your background is just as good lol. Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on September 14, 2010
Last Updated on August 3, 2013
Tags: lovely, alone, invisible


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