Lower

Lower

A Poem by BLitZeD

I stand once more to lower this b***h
Cut um off like a mower an rip 
with a tight grip the pull string from the motor an s**t/
Leave her like a ten  dollar blower, just lips/
down her throat like my knife but that's a lot slower and slits/
your all for show, just about the glam and glitz 
you claim a life style that you wouldn't dare live/
you live in the Ritz, you couldn't even sit on the strip 
a piece on the hip, lit like a candle so you forcefully stip
gave up all your money, payment for a feigns next hit/ 
Pooh Bear with the honey, honey your what happens if Eyore and Piglet had a kid.

© 2015 BLitZeD


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this here is dope!! love the scheme!

Posted 8 Years Ago


BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

thought youd like this one :)
silent poet

8 Years Ago

yes I do crazy thing is every time i thought I had a favorite here came another dope one
Hi Blitzed. You sent a read request for this, so I gave it a shot. It's interesting because I absolutely HATE rap and yet I found myself bouncing along to the rhythm of this. Then I read another review that also mentioned rap. I haven't the slightest idea what it's about but it seems pretty hostile and angry. And yet while I don't like it at all, at the same time I can admire the phonetics and rhythm that you've put into it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

thank you, the way i write i think people call it rap because its not your typical poetry, the way i.. read more
Spitting fire! I love the last line... mic drop and walk away haha... nice work!

Posted 8 Years Ago


BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

haha, thanks man
Wow, intense bit of freelance poetry there, passionate and direct. I can see this being part of a great rap, awesome job :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is strong. And unique. Symbolic in its own way so much so it could bring this poem to life. I almost wonder is it anger or passion...

Posted 8 Years Ago


damn ,she must have pissed you off ! great write

Posted 8 Years Ago


Interesting rant, strong language to give the threats more impact, then attack the lifestyle and self-image to bend the will, sounds like something Charles Manson could have written. Clap! Clap!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Blitzed, I've said this before, you have a very unique style propelled by unique talent, where's your f****n' publisher? The way you've composed this carefully, beginning with stark, even violent, images whittled down to The House on Pooh Corner...a seemingly impossible leap but you make it work for you! I get more amazed every piece of yours I read. This is going into my library favorites, so thank you for that! take care...dan

Posted 8 Years Ago


You writing gives the reader fear and that's good cause I see that you always write strong poems with challenging words and you delivered the feeling to the reader.

Insight.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

BLitZeD

8 Years Ago

fear, thats an interesting outlook on it. the whole reason i write on here is just to see what other.. read more
Insight "MH"

8 Years Ago

It's maybe the lion affecting me ^_^

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