Take me away

Take me away

A Poem by noteverythingisperfect
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this poem is to show how i feel about fake people. i hate people who judge, and for a time, i did... most everybody does. This poem was to be like my new beginning and show what i have left behind me.

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Do we ever stay true to who we are?

Do we sometimes try and cover the scars?

Well, this poem is to reveal all of mine.

I'm tired of trying to cover something up with what is fake.

No more lies, I promise. 

Time to take off this mask, and show my true colours. 

Most would see me as so innocent. 

But is this true, no.

I've done many things to which i regret. 

Most of which I wish I could change.

But that's all behind me now. 

I'm a new, free soul, breaking free and flying away.

Just like a dove in the hands of nature,

Nature

Take me away.... 

© 2010 noteverythingisperfect


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I think this was written with a confession in mind.
Which I believe makes this write that much stronger.
Great feel great job.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Well nice to know you are going to rely on nature to "take you away".

Every fourth line I'd turn into a stanza. I also would recommend doing the below to the last line:-

Just like a dove
In the hands of nature
Nature
Take me away....

Those are my suggestions for improving it's readability. As for the words, thought provoking and gives us an incite into who you are, who you have been and who you are choosing to be.

For your first poem on writers cafe, great job! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago



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i am undecided with who i am.. life is a long journey that takes misleading turns and you never know where you may end up.. i guess i am just another individual on a path that leads to an unknown spac.. more..

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