women age like leaves.

women age like leaves.

A Poem by Jinelly
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couples grow old.

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orange peels on her feet
and white string sewn into her scalp.
bones dissolving into powder
choking on dancing smoke.
now deducting the sum of broken eyes
and well used scissors.
walking paths that intersect with old lovers
and framed memories.
all while time is smeared on her face and fingers.
wasted on kissed cigarettes
and menthol infested sofas.
sun up, eyes wide
sun down, limbs drop.
desires drip from her pours.

© 2009 Jinelly


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I agree with all the reviews that said that this was excellent! I adore that the imagery is slightly surreal! It is basically as perfect as you could get it!

Rather touching and very beautiful!

AHouseOfChambers

Posted 15 Years Ago


all while time is smeared on her face and fingers.
wasted on kissed cigarettes
and menthol infested sofas.



LOVED that.


I was skeptical at first, I thought you were like every other girl on here.
You're lines are clever. I like that.

I will definitely read more.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Wow this sounds like a night out with a few junkies no seriously this is very well written i enjoyed the bright and breezy descriptive verses here especially the decay in humanity throughout the years takingit's wear and tear,people think so much about personal health and beauty these days but in all honesty we are all powerless to prevent ageing and smoking doesn't help accelerating the decline and making the skin age rapidly,well done.
By the way in your bio you mentioned about your living arrangements how do you manage to get a laptop computer to work under that rubble? lol :-)

Posted 15 Years Ago


Wow, I think this was excellent.. the scene set to perfection .. the little passages of aging.. so slightly focused and yet so utterly clear.

Posted 15 Years Ago


nice , really unique, images done a different way

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on September 11, 2009
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Jinelly
Jinelly

New York, NY



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