Darkness Or Light

Darkness Or Light

A Poem by Lissianna
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Random poem I came up with

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Eyes of crimson 
Wings of white 
Am I made of darkness or light?

Skies of blue
Bed of fire
What do I truely desire?

Does choas really stem and bloom 
From the same flower as order
Or do they come from different buds?

I know its wrong that I enjoy blood
But tell me is it truely a beautiful red
Or is it all in my head?

Sometimes I feel like I've lost touch
I've gone bonkers or mad
But is that truely bad?

Maybe there is still some good in me
I have love and compassion
Would you really abandon me in such a cold fashion?

Maybe I too stem from a wonderous and confusing flower
Something of both chaos and order
Or maybe I'm just carefully waiting to tip the boarder

The world may never know 
Where I truely lay my sword 
But in time we'll see....after the war

© 2016 Lissianna


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Wow This is such a captivating piece! Personally I think there is a thin line in our minds About what it is right and wrong,What's good and what is evil. But I know you learn from experience there are somethings in life that we seek and we want to explore. Your poem shows that, A woman struggling to find her self between what She wants and what she is destined for. But one thing is for sure The people in the war,that's by your side that looks at you in admiration you are gonna protect them for they are apart of you and therefor you are good enough for me :) Really good and provoking piece :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lissianna

6 Years Ago

Thank you ^.^ that was a lovely review



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Wars are for soldiers and girl you are, no mention of clouds or stars, as fire is red and without a sound, the body asks but love cant be found. Very good write

Posted 4 Years Ago


Wow This is such a captivating piece! Personally I think there is a thin line in our minds About what it is right and wrong,What's good and what is evil. But I know you learn from experience there are somethings in life that we seek and we want to explore. Your poem shows that, A woman struggling to find her self between what She wants and what she is destined for. But one thing is for sure The people in the war,that's by your side that looks at you in admiration you are gonna protect them for they are apart of you and therefor you are good enough for me :) Really good and provoking piece :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lissianna

6 Years Ago

Thank you ^.^ that was a lovely review
This is fun and easy to follow. I read it several times since it was fun and well done! Truly is misspelled.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This piece has a nice flow to it and is quite an enjoyable read. For some, beauty can be found in darkness.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is an intriguing piece.

I enjoyed the rhymes and I thought you had some good word choices. You did make a few spelling mistakes but that wasn't enough to jar me from my read.

And while this piece may be about some form of angel on the surface of the write, I feel that it has a much deeper meaning. The constant queries the narrator makes are really those of a lost soul, a regular human, wondering if they are good or bad. And of course, we've been asking ourselves that question for millennia. We still don't have a definitive answer.

My thoughts are that it all boils down to choice and perception. We can choose which path to follow, but we do so based on what we perceive, on our experiences.

This is well written and thought provoking.

-Caradoc

Posted 7 Years Ago


One root......HUGE tree.......Just keep branching out......what harm can there be

intriguing poem...I loved it

Posted 7 Years Ago


You question well and bring your listener with you.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Again you did an awesome job by dropping such sort of nice words through this piece. I again enjoyed reading the piece you made. I've to say you've a great talent to write. Everything what you write's real and of course always comes from the life of joy, life of pain, life of happiness as well as life of darkness or light and so on. I'm glad reading the piece even right now i'm feeling very honorable onself reading your nice writes. Thanks for putting your time making such a nice stuffs. I enjoyed reading this piece.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I enjoy the poem, though there is one spelling error (chaos not choas). I like the diction you used, as well as the metaphors. Though I think it might be more powerful if you changed up the rhyme scheme at sometime in the poem. But thats just my opinion. All and all though, I think it is magnificent!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Interesting thought, it really makes one think. For one, I like the contrast of chaos being a bloom, as flowers are not chaotic. There's a lot of good metaphors in here. I like the thought of blood being something beautiful. Isn't it? It does give us life after all, but bleeding out where we can see it, it does not. The stanza, "Sometimes I feel like I've lost touch
I've gone bonkers or mad
But is that truely bad?" gives the poem a very alice in wonderland type feel, which is a good thing, I think.
I also like this poem because it shows that people are not entirely good, nor are they entirely evil (or in this case dark or light) A very dr. jekyll and mr. Hyde idea, if you will, though done in verse instead.
Overall, excellent piece :) ~Tunder~ 100/100

Posted 8 Years Ago



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