porcelain dolls

porcelain dolls

A Poem by loserface mcgee

Like porcelain dolls
Like porcelain dolls with their faces cracked
Like porcelain dolls
Like china dolls with holes in their hearts where there
Should be love and there should be kindness
All there is is just cold and stuffing
Like porcelain dolls
Like porcelain dolls their faces are cracked
Like porcelain dolls
But under it's just another mask
And they're lying, I know
But it doesn't seem so
And they're just so damn good
At acting so damn bad
And I'm just
A breakable, fragile, breaking
Porcelain doll.

© 2009 loserface mcgee


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Wonderful concept and a great end. I would consider less repetition, and using some pronouns- the amount of times that you use "porcelain dolls" is overwhelming towards the beginning. Otherwise, nicely done. c:

-Coral-

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very well written. I look forward to reading more.

Posted 13 Years Ago


u is a genius -cling-

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The words flow like lyrics to me. I think they would be nice set to music. Nicely done.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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loserface mcgee
loserface mcgee

st. louis, MO



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