Not a poem

Not a poem

A Poem by frozensakura

 I should have just said what was on my mind


Should have said 
I'm a mess

 and 

I'm breaking down
I need a hug 

and 

stop asking what's wrong 
Shut up 

and

let me cry


let me cry until I can't cry anymore

But of course I didn't

© 2013 frozensakura


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emo..gave up on breakups until people evolve...could take awhile........so i just love myself....im a selfish lil buddhist

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Why is this called "Not a poem"? I'm curious. I like your enjambment in the poem, the way it makes the words seem broken - just like the emotions you're conveying. Nice work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Many people feel or felt this way. you wrote this very well. I wish you the best for your troubles to go away.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Words you wish that you can take back but it's too late or the feelings of loneliness is what I got. At some parts it sounded awkward and incomplete, but I liked the simplicity and what the poem implies.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ah, you can never take back what you never said. I love that theme. The poem is really emotional and easily to relate to. There are some lines that don't exactly flow, per se, but in a whole this poem is gold. (^A^)

Posted 6 Years Ago


I can definitely relate to this poem and I'm sure a lot of other people can too. Love it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


I really liked it

Posted 6 Years Ago


Very deep, I love it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Oh, how many times I could have said just that. It is so very heartfelt.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Really good poem. I like the rhythm!

Posted 6 Years Ago



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