Song

Song

A Poem by frozensakura

Consumed in darkness

waiting in silence

Listening to those dear words

Your lies

 

Feeling my heart beat

Swallow all my fear

Allow me not to faulter

 

Why sing aloud

When nothing will be found

In my choked up teared words

I may sing not so clear

 

Overcoming sleepless nights

Gotta get some rest tonight

Confusing thoughts in mind

Will it last

 

Fading laughter

Fading time

Waiting for someone

To sing along

 

Waisting time

Don't know why

And maybe I dont understand

Why wait for someone to change my mind

© 2011 frozensakura


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really nice!
i really like this..
great job :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


frozensakura

11 Years Ago

Thanks !!
cool, why is everyone better then me it not farrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Peaceworker22

11 Years Ago

You just have to practice and "feel" the poetry. I just focus my emotions and somehow the emotions b.. read more
Peaceworker22

11 Years Ago

I just focus *on (Oops)
frozensakura

11 Years Ago

juss keep writing. the more you write the easier it will get and you will get better.
Nice! I love how this piece was written. It flowed so well and i love the emotions! =D great write!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Sorry, I accidentally pressed submit before I had finished. I like the repeating idea of the song and singing. This was a really nice poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I enjoyed the emotions that came across in this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like the emotions in this. Good job

Posted 12 Years Ago


Really sad. I loved the lines
"Fading laughter
Fading time
Waiting for someone
To sing along"

They mirror the tone of this poem really well. Good job o this one.

Posted 12 Years Ago


i really like it :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very nice, I like this a lot, you fit so much into this and yet it is so nice and it fits.

Posted 12 Years Ago


really great work! i don't know how to explain how amazing it was! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago



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frozensakura
frozensakura

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