Look at her

Look at her
Cut up, broken
Abandoned

Look at her
Cry and scream
Clawing at her face
What a disgrace

"how beautiful"
"your so cute"
look again in the damn mirror
It always proves you wrong

The girl they see
She's nothing like me
Why can't they tell us apart?

Is being free
Such a tragedy 
I guess that's what they mean

Reviews

[Echo Nightfield]

A lot of easily connectable emotion here. I, myself, can relate all too well. I can't really take compliments myself.

However, just to be constructive (not destructive, I promise) I would like to see the sentences in the quotations start off capitalized and using the proper English spelling. ( i.e You're instead of your) I don't really like text typing in anyplace other then texting but I'm just old fashioned I guess.

Beautifully written though. Good job girls!

[icerhex]

This is so very touching, and very relatable to many girl's lives, including at times, my own. Great rhythm and style, I love it.

[frozensakura]

Thanks!!

[meltingtuba]

I have totally been there, done that. I relate to that poem so much (you know, minus the clawing). great poem, the rhymes get very bunched up at the end though.

[frozensakura]

thanks for the review!

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Perfection...something to strive for and yet never achieve? Keeps you young! It's all a matter of opinion anyway. Nice writing, my dear :)

[Lindsay T]

This is beautiful and your structure of words was really graceful. I could understand everything that you meant, which was great as it was a relatable read. Nice work!

[account not in use]

sometimes i play russian roulette with my reflection just to know who i really am in that split-second of absolute clarity before i pull the trigger.. perfection is, at times, questionable because we constantly focus on our flaws and the cost of freedom is usually very high.. thank you for sharing this lovely piece of writing.. ♥

[Bare trees]

There are many who doubt themselves to their own detriment. They simply won't let go of a perfect image that is unobtainable. Good writing.

[frozensakura]

thanks!

[daydreamer]

Lovely write. Freedom comes at a price. Simple yet touching:)

[frozensakura]

thank you!

[Enar]

I really like free verse...
but it has to be good like this poem

[Laura Maidah]

she sounds like a doll of a girl, with skeleton features, and long fragil cigarette legs. It's perfect. The last line? PLEASE PM ME. I need to know what you meant. I got so many meanings for it, it's bananas.

[Kaylor Mason]

I love this . . .it has a double meaning. It could be people comparing you with a best friend or a sister, or how someone smiles and goes about their day, appearing perfect, while inside they're tearing themselves apart and weeping. We never see ourselves the same way others see us. Awesome writing.