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A Poem by Brandee D. Hack
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The rain whispers
the sun shines
the trees remain silent.

ありがとうみなさ�"。
Thank you everyone.

Without words -
much can be said.
Without words -
one remains dead.

Among the throne
Commoners weep.
Within the crown
'er Majesty sleeps.

With wonder anon'
sweet thoughts drift...
with sacrifice comes courage
and also it slips.

What remains it time
is how you live.
The secrets you hold,
pass on to your kin.

Yet one never believes
the end is near.
Nay. with a blink
you may disappear.

S'il vous plait, attention,
nothing is simply done.

Yet what is right
may spark a gleam.
Please remember
thy words are steam.

Whisp-ing through time
though nothing has changed.
Everything's different
yet everything's changed.

Other's are controlled
like roots on a tree.
If one is uprooted
the Earth screams.

Deem what is right
what is unseen.
You may be a peasant
or a royal - unclean.

Yet in the end
we are all one.
One with each other 
One with the sun.

In many years
nothing has changed.
We are all human
we remain the same.

Rulers come
Death overtakes.
Loves is full
yet in blood it shakes.

Life is heart
yet sacrifice it makes.
Living without
yet burning in flames.

Cruel are the humans
all whom walk the Earth.
For nothing is changed
nothing is done.

Render your hopes
Express passion anon!
Whisper unto the elders
all you've become.

Bleed within
the emotions that tear.
Understand
your are not only here.

Courge and virtue
lost in this mist.
Among the tragedies
the world is amiss!

Leave thy love
Sacrifice none.
Hope for life
Die in strife.

What have we become?
Where are we to run?

© 2012 Brandee D. Hack


Author's Note

Brandee D. Hack
Interpret it as you will. I simply hope that you will tell me what your view is on my work. - Thank you.

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This had an anonymous beautiful neutrality that transcends time. Not to mention a druidic Yeats-quality?

Posted 9 Years Ago


Some verses work much better than others in your interesting poem. Generally the flow is good, but sometimes you cut the rhythm, like in the 9th verse, ending "screams"... maybe think of altering so the rhythm is better.

Also, the line "and also it slips." is weak in comparison to the rest of the verse, made so by "also".

Your poem has loads of potential, and is well-written. Thank you for sharing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I love your thougths. You write of paradox, of truth, of history, all in relation to the human element. A touch of Old English gives this piece a unique flavor. Well done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah emotion ruling the day I can relate to a life led from emotion and tempered with rule

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Brandee D. Hack
Brandee D. Hack

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Hello all. My name is Brandee. I have wrote many different genres of writings for many years. I hope that by putting it up that that will help me get some feedback and constructive criticism. .. more..

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