Ghoul

Loosely based off the anime Tokyo Ghoul.

i'm hollow--
a gaping chasm of grief, despair
heart throbbing with an empty ache of sorrow
don't try to find me;
i can't even find myself
morals and beliefs drowned in this hell--
of the banshee cries,
an unrecognisable smile;
who am i when everything's changed inside?

keep your distance
keep your guard
deep within;
a monster howls

Reviews

[Alexanda Corrin]

I really not Ikr this! But I may be a bit biased because I love Tomyo Ghoul and have just come from reading the latest manga chapter so... On to the actual review, I really love your writing style! The poem flows well and draws me in! I especially like the ending and the overall mood you convey! I feel that this is a perfect reflection on kaneki in TG and a great expression on what Sui Ishida wants to convey in his work, of how everyone has their monsters especially after life changing events!

[Brenda Woods]

Yesssss, a Tokyo Ghoul fan! :D I haven't read the manga at all, just watched the series (I'm a student in NZ, it's a bit difficult and expensive to keep up with manga, though maybe one day I'll read it!)
I'm glad you enjoyed it, that means a lot to me!

[Alexanda Corrin]

Love Tokyo ghoul! You can read it online, the manga is 100x better than the anime, the end of the anime and second season are completely different and took ghσul : re is amazing! I'd send a fellow fan the first volume - I have that in paperback - but I'm pretty 'poor' myself...

[Brenda Woods]

Oh, I'll have to look for it online then!! :)

[PhillipCalitz12]

this is not bad at all... well done

[Brenda Woods]

Thank you!

[Ron]

Ah Ha! Brenda. Refreshing to see work about inner demons & away from never ending love gained, unrequited or lost! In every human a monster lurks. Brenda Woods is no exception! Keep up original work!

[Brenda Woods]

I'm glad you liked it! Must admit, I do try to change things up with my writing and not get too stuck in the same genre - especially romance - because then I worry that my writing is becoming too repetitive and that I'm not growing as a writer.

Thank you for your kind review!

[mattavelli]

Is this a zombie's point of view? I don't know ghouls, but I know zombies.

[Brenda Woods]

Kind of. More like a vampire, though. The character this is about turns from a human into a half-ghoul, and this was me trying to imagine what feelings he has about turning into a monstrous creature.

[mattavelli]

Got it. The last four lines tell me that he may Learn to like it.

[Jocie de Jaune]

Wow, this poem speaks to me on so many personal levels. It's written with such confidence and meaning yet kept short and simple, you make a nearly impossible task look easy! I agree with Katrina but my favourite lines are definately 'don't try to find me; I can't even find myself'. They are so complex and I really connect with the feeling that you don't know who you are. Excellent, vivid imagery makes me clearly picture the monster inside your 'gaping chasm of grief and despair'.Just an amazing and haunting masterpiece, best poem I've read in a long time.

[Brenda Woods]

Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[KanaDream]

This holds truth. Look at what the world has done to people. Heaven knows we didn't dig out our own soul. Very nice work! I really like it. "Don't try to find me; i can't even find myself" Amazing.. Keep Dreaming. ^^

[Brenda Woods]

Thank you very much! Glad you liked it :)

[Windora Grey]

KANEKI sorry i'm big on Tokyo Ghoul
Brilliant poem, by the way. It's the kind of thing I'd expect to be an opening for Tokyo Ghoul.

[Brenda Woods]

YE! And no no, don't apologise for that!
Thank you very much! Might be inspired a bit by the opening, to be honest. I recommend you take a look at LeeandLie's version of the Tokyo Ghoul opening; she's translated it into English, and it's gorgeous and haunting.

[Katrina]

I particularly enjoyed this line "who am i when everything's changed inside?" Maybe it's because I relate to having thought such things about myself. But sometimes when everything changes, it's good. And sometimes the more ghoulish aspects of yourself are what makes you stronger. You have really lovely imagery, by the way. I just really felt this piece.

[Brenda Woods]

Thank you very much! Agree with you completely, thanks for your kind words :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

this is beautifully worded.......
dark yet fun to read.......
we all reside a monster in us.........

"keep your distance
keep your guard
deep within;
a monster howls
"
Bravo!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[Brenda Woods]

Thank you, I'm glad you did! :)

[Pushkar Prabhat]

you are welcome.........!!! :) :)

[Demii]

Great choice of words, very intense and strong. The words come crashing at you with emotion. Good read :)

[Brenda Woods]

Thank you very much!